This Poem was Submitted By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-04-15 22:36:35 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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La Famiglia I
Sicily
You bring the wine
I’ll bring the glass
and we shall dance
You bring the gentle smile
I’ll bring soft tears
and we shall embrace
You bring the strength
I’ll bring the lace
and we shall part
For the morrow
each, to kiss cheeks
each, to wrap fish
as Hail Marys are said
a truce, once born of love
will be put to bed
II
Milan
Breath exhaled on a dream
feathers frosted fantasies shimmer
iced silver moon shards shiver
as I slump to quiver in ashen repose
blackened rose lays bent, dropping petals
in slowing precision’s drift
a cadence set
matching hearts last beats
tainted Lambrusco, clouds your artist eyes
lost in images studying
my scarf splashed and dappled
with vibrant colors fractured flashes
III
Alla fine’
Our canvas’ morphing vacant
no crying, no sacraments
no lives without honor in shrouds
forbidden love eclipsed
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Copyright © April 2010 Lora Silvey
Additional Notes:
author’s notes
Italian:
La Famiglia = the family
Lambrusco = an Italian wine
Alla fine’ = in the end
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-05-06 13:13:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.87500
I like how you structured this poem, it enhances the flow and divides the verses nicely. Your pen, has brought a great poem out - a true love poem, Italian style, with many outstanding lines that combine the message with the imagery. Of course when reading this one must hear violin music to add to the pleasure of the post.
Really good Lora, and on my list,
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-05-04 16:14:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Lora,
I'm half Italian. Mama Mia!
My crazy southern family.
I like your poem it flows well.
It sounds like someone close was Italian [secret love].
They all seem to go and one is left alone.
The Italians are pretty emotional,good or bad.
They live fuly with robust.
I'm personally not robusting as I should!
Ciao,
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-04-20 10:29:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Lora,
I would say 'WOW' if it weren't so commonplace. I have read other poems from you pen but this one has to be your best, so far. You have written some extrodinary phrases and some I wish I had thought of first. Part 11, Milan, contain images and words that are breath taking. I attempted to pick a favorite but failed miserably as every line is special, not that the others aren't but that strophe is remarkable. Well done.
Best wishes,
cheyenne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-04-16 09:24:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I know Silvey is a fine, ancient Spanish name, but wonder from this piece if your surname was italian.
Lora, I do love it when you wax sensual- you do it so well.
The mix of romance and culture is captivating. Having been in Sicily and Milan, and other places in Italy, the piece place a special recall to me for the local culture and religious influence.
You final stanza and its "forbidden love" left me wanting more. Few may grasp it, but the use of "morphing" towards the "picture" you painted is brilliant.
I know selling a romance piece is not the modern appeal, but it appealed to me.
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