This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-06-11 17:16:57 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Word Power Pen set to paper
with instinctual display
Interweaves the words
that one endeavors to say
Ideas flow free as a river
bending with time
Leaning to the ocean
as the journey of mind
Thoughtful weighty topics
come passionately strong
Elegant laced phrasing
whisper gently to sound
The pattern of a piece
has potential design
To affect man's acceptance
so hearts realign |
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Copyright © June 2010 Dellena Rovito
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-06-26 14:59:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Dellena,
A good concise write of thoughts a writer may have when sitting down to knock out a poem, short story, or any other type of writing. It's distinct, and short added imagery makes this poem, very easy to read and relax with.
Great topic, good form, and a pleasure to read.
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-06-14 14:45:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Dellena,
This is a fabulous poem and one I enjoyed reading fromt the first line to the last. To me it says the reason we write, poets have to do that, you know. I wonder about those who have left this site and where they are posting their work. They can't help but write poetry as it is a big part of who they are. You have written some excellent phrases in this poem and the theme is good. Well done.
Best wishes,
cheyenne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-06-13 18:18:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dellena, your tribute to the craft and the crafter is easily read, and intuitive to the crafter him/herself. In the end you capture the affect of the craft, that is “affects man’s acceptanc, so hearts realignâ€. You were nice.
What I mean by that is, there is a lot of “elegant phrasing†that cedes other fruit.
Your rhymes were quite well done. S2L4, I think would have maintained the strong mental image you were after if you kept the rhyme true, (say “in songâ€). Maybe it is more lyrical, but in the context of your piece, I still think it would create a similar, if not exact meaning.
Thanks again for sharing.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-06-12 00:06:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Very nicely done Dellena. Excellent format that lends itself most pleasantly to the words you've used and the subject you've offered us. Your flow is easy and the meter constant which moves your reader through your verses without hesitation. Your subject, while most elegantly stated is easily determined and I concur with your opinion on writing. Bravo, a most enjoyable read. No nits or spags, no suggestions for changes-- your work stands well on its own merrit. Lora
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