This Poem was Submitted By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-08-20 15:46:47 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Her Garland Grows

Capricious spring has left with much ado replaced by echoes warming breath that peels the skin of winter back to thaw the gurgling brook and icy moor The summer never claimed to set me free in paths of butterflies she cast when her leaves unfurl in glistening green and flower nectar sweet of bloom Instead she let the garland grow in shades of baby breath and coral wings A touch of sapphire light on honeyed fern becomes a promise heaven keeps Her beauty sweeps the lacquered ground and stones a rake of sky will hurl the stars above the moon and over brims of earth escorting sun with streaks of maize She spreads her petticoats like dancers will adorns my path with butterflies and lets them light my way with velvet hues where summer frees me from the cold

Copyright © August 2010 cheyenne smyth


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-09-06 17:17:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Cheyenne, We have had a cold summer so much for freedom from the cold! [Northwest] Your words are lovely of course. Feminine, fluffy and sweet. If all our days could live up to that potential. How great it would be. Enjoyed this. Dellena


This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-08-30 01:18:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.60000
Instead she let the garland grow in shades of baby breath and coral wings A touch of sapphire light on honeyed fern becomes a promise heaven keeps Outstanding Cheyenne, This is poetry at it's best, yet again shared here - Obviously the above was my fav verse. I love the title you chose for this, very original and eye catching. It reads well - and flows in structure with just a few nits, some words could be omitted, extra The's, also "ands" to tighten up the form. Aside from that it's on my list for August - you inspire me with your delicate style and arrangement of words that enhance each poem you leave your own original "imprint." blessings, Deni
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