This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-11-23 10:15:40 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Thankful Days Walk Autumn is fine
each day in the season
is what is with time.
Aged to the end
towards new beginnings again
as the colors mesmerize
the holidays before our eyes.
Every sated days
have passed with "thanks"
while dismay has
challenged us to pass
Tests with falling time
the damaged leaves
bid promise of hope around
bare trees
What was has changed
another year shifted and rearranged.
While in each heart
damned good reasons of life remain. |
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Copyright © November 2010 DeniMari Z.
Additional Notes:
Sorry for my absence for November especially with reading and commenting on everyone's poems. A personal issue came up with my beautiful daughter Dana, and I was with her out of state for two weeks helping her and my three grandsons - ages 17,
and 10. Grateful to be home before the holiday with knowing my visit helped her.
if I see one poem here that says "Happy Turkey Day".......hmmm - no never here!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2010-12-08 03:24:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Beautiful. Hopeful. I cannot critque others writings, I only know what I like and what I don't. Damn good reasons. Well done!
in His Name,
Medard
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-11-30 15:57:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
Hi Deni,
I hope by now your daughter has resolved her issues. This is a fine poem with lovely words and a gentle flow. I especially like the lines...what was has changed, another year shifted and rearranged....so very true. Well done
Best wishes,
cheyennne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2010-11-28 21:45:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.82353
Deni,
A delightful, refreshing piece. It is good to see your post again. This flows well and the images speak clearly. "...as the colors mesmerize the holidays before our eyes." Thank you for this line, it gives me a way to express a boding anxiety that i often feel in the autumn/fall. Holidays are not always easy, yet I love autumn. your line, for me, describes how something wonderful can send me into a tale spin of something not so great. But yet, still within "damned good reasons of life remain." Thanks for this write!
Mandie
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-11-28 01:12:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
Yes, Deni, I wish you the best for the holiday seasons. Your poem reminds gently that we need to be thankful for all things, each season has its own gifts just as each day does. Your poem flows easily down the page like a leaf floating to ground. Hope all is better with you. Nice write. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-11-24 08:34:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Poignant, a very well written, poignant image.
I particularly liked the "tests with falling time", and promises presented in the changing and falling leaves. It is reminiscent of the ressurection, maybe of life or otherwise.
"damned good reasons of life remain". What can one image beyond that? "Colors Mesmerize"- there in the issuance of the season is the reason for coninuation, "holidays" notwithstanding, or maybe bacuase of such.
Very well done.
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