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Underneath the Mask Darkness consumes the depths of the soul As depression begins to ease its way in. Motivation escapes, the will just deflates - Desire has gone to the wind. Lack of energy grinds everything to a halt; There’s no moving forward or back. Muscles have frozen and so they betray As the body comes under attack. No will to live, no desire to die - Floating aimlessly in limbo. Mind shutting down - Where did she go? Lost in space, numb and frozen, Paralyzed, lack of emotion. What will it take? How will she make It out of this position? Sleep promises escape into fairy tale lands; While reality marches on anyway. The body rests, the mind recoups Until she awakes to face a new day. Depression un-lifted, darkness still surrounds. She pulls on her mask so all can see - That she is “happy†and doing “okay†Instead of living in misery. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-03-07 22:31:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I have so much to say to this piece and so little time. I must return to the hospital for a family member- it has been so all month; yet this piece, I have read many times.
Sleep, depression, fairy tale dreams. I had to leave you with this, and also your piece about the sweet outdoors-
you have a feel to your verse that explores many regions many ignore.
I appreciate the journey.