This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2011-02-07 18:29:20 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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With a Sigh

He never sang his song of love Tunes yearned, for the hearts resolve Calling him to answer longings ladies chimed and sang timbre strong   He kept emotions in their place in the space of so grim aloneness  Believing that he would be safe  distanced from any stress or harm Without protest and without sound  he plod the pathway dusk to dawn at last to bond with ill timed fate

Copyright © February 2011 Dellena Rovito

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-02-21 11:22:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Very nice poem Dellena. Reminds me of a man that couldn't share feelings nor emotions and was a bit controlling at times. Strange in life how we each have our own unique personality that some grow with to change for the better than others remain the same always. Great word choices to make this poem stand out in an interesting subtle manner. I enjoyed this poem, blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-02-13 21:08:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, the brokenhearted, the needy of soul; I could hear God as the “hound of heaven” or the inverse, Myrrdin searching for love naked in the forest. Mostly, I know the callings, I have lived your poem at times. Fate as well, you have characterized as impervious to the feelings- well done. You could have written this entire piece a a triumphant allegory, and still ended it with your final line “at last to bond with ill timed fate”. The line that leaves me lacking is “he never san his song of love”- how sad, the life, and without the attempt. Well said Lady.
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-02-08 14:55:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Dellena, This poem, laced with melancholy in every line speaks to me. There have been times in my life where I took the path of safety to distance myself from harm. It is a lonely path. This is a fine free verse poem written in couplets. You have chosen good words that are expressive and evocative. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2011-02-07 18:52:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dellena, I don't know what to say of this...not sure I fully understand what it is about...feeling a bit duped on it. That said, I do like it, despite not understanding it. I don't know...there's something melancholic about it. I think in line 2 it should read "heart's resolve" otherwise no other complaints. I will have to come back to this a few times...I do believe your title is rather apt as I sighed upon finishing the read. Not sure if that was you're intention or not...but there you have it...Keep writing...I enjoy your style. Mandie
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