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Rantings of the Divided Mind, Part I
I. what has happened? where have i been? lost within my mindâ€™s dim screaming rage fighting fears we thought had been gone all these years the struggle to remain aware but losing fast our steely glare the point we catch reality get lost in nightmarish scenes tormenting day in night out spinning round and round about dizzy now but clutching still afraid to lose what we think is real but nobody knows how to feel when No One goes about her deal to see the light of burning truth that life is real and not a spoof but such a cost that we all pay for insanity to come our way even she gets confused when round again we start to lose our grip when spinning so fast even No One cannot last a scrambled mess we become and panic sets under the gun a threat to life internally? No One knows or so it seems . . . but she is lost among the bits and pieces strewn about from twirling round and round about the game is real or life it is either way the cost is the same fresh wounds appear from where they came nobody knows and all are tired of the game of figuring out who is the One who did the deed and they are done ready to quit give up the fight no more split unite tonight but evil has other plans and sends in demons to spin again until she collapses under the weight they drive her still to reach the gate the other side has won again another One from the mindâ€™s dim evil lurks all around waiting for us to fall down and when we do they come again to spin us round and round about forget what we know and drown us out wounds remind of evilâ€™s presence a warning to those caught in reminiscence and don't forget to fight the spinning round about. we are not alone inside there really is nowhere to hide - not alive but never died.
This Poem was Critiqued By: David Keesey On Date: 2011-02-15 00:28:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I would like to rewrite this if I may. I like the dark under tone. I will send it outside ptl. Kindest Regards, David
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