This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-03-16 03:33:42 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Growth Spurt

Did you steal the flowers of yesterday's years to plant a garden today? In order to smother a life with your immature habits and ways? Did you grow up without growing too old? Is ignorance of actions breaking apart, hurting, taunting just to scold? Must you blame call names and bully through your life? To bribe your egos senses of where you stand just to hurt a fellow man. Who wins who loses of repetitiously pitting man to man? Many refuse to grow hearts with a painless plan.  Children play and learn to their teens but never realize the impact of mean. Grown-ups see yet they can’t let go nor ever show love or happiness for everyone; bid time to good thoughts not blame, shame or sicken anyone.

Copyright © March 2011 DeniMari Z.

Additional Notes:
Note: Hatred, racism, unusual behavior of people who should know better as adults that it is quite dysfunctional to spew their own personal anger on others causing emotional pain that causes hurt to others. They lay down their heads on their pillows at night feeling satisfied, justified while they put thoughts in others minds who need to learn what ever has been said, done or distressed them in in the hands of "God" and let God do his work. Always take the high road!


This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-03-26 11:12:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.87500
This piece is current or as old as mankind. There is much truth contained in your words. I do have a twelve year old in jr. high, and to this day- the bullying and learned behaviors are no different than when I grew up. There are a litany of reasons adults poison their children. In the end, as you say “man to man” the resulting adults are the grown children “growth spurts”. Using “spurt” as a metaphor for the entire piece is brilliant. Many will see the “increase” in growing, so to speak, but I think most readers will miss the secondary meaning of “gushing or expunging”. In your piece- the need for truth, acceptance and compassion in our society, and with our children, is accurate and needful.


This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-03-21 12:22:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Hi Deni, There is nothing more hurtful than words slung in haste, at someone. How those who do this can live with themselves is beyond me. You have excellent rhyming couplets except for your third verse where you deviate from the rhyme scheme. But no matter as the poem reads good the way it is. You have tackled a tough subject and written it well with good word choices and an even flow. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne
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