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This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2011-05-11 09:05:41 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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American Lie

You want to feel good bedding down with any lie Unconnected from Truth cause you won't pay attention Got no intention....to It doesn't matter how the lies scatter First time you look around any corner To see things that matter Don't use rainwater in tea anymore Don't play in the rain even It'll get you dreaming nightmares when you wake.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2011-05-26 15:55:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
JCH You are talking about radioactive fallout from nuclear plant! There was a short sweet? article about staying indoors for a few days and no more news mentioned. I called the public schools to see if school continued as usual. yes! Recess outside, noon outside, no condition to accompany the falling hazard from the high. Innocent children completely oblivious as well may be their parents. Of course the weather manipulators turned up and on the sun to bring outside the people to play. What a joke or mind game. Cancer in the future anyone.. The one thing that may help us is iodine [Lugol's water purifier] used for fish acquariums. The body is lacking iodine, it was removed from most foods. [why? when it's so vital to life?] and the death toll rings..... dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-05-19 11:22:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Nicely done James. The complexities in life that go beyond the average thought pattern of people living life - who never try to learn more about the general state of affairs surrounding us leaving us clueless to unbelievable matters, doings behind the scenes - and more. The impact of it is scary - but we're made to have to live like this-without much chance of changing our thoughts knowing well what the truth is- no matter how hard it is kept from us. Great poem, thank you for being here for May, blessings as always, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Pat Eaklor On Date: 2011-05-18 22:52:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi, James, Goodness, this is deeper than I thought on my first reading... And you're right. "They" DO tell us not to do whatever it is we've always done. I like this poem, James. It kinda reminds me of the 60's! Pat

This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-05-17 17:55:07
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi James, I have read this poem many times and I am still not sure I get it. I am sure it is political, which I never write so no wonder I am at a loss here! "bedding down with a lie" is a great line and I am sure we do that more than we would like to. In your last line of the first verse I struggled with the word "to" and think you could delete it and still get your point across. Unless, of course, it is necessary in the message. Also your last two lines of the second verse are powerful and make sense to me. Sadly I have had nightmares while awake. Sorry...I will need you to enlighten me as to the meaning. Best wishes, cheyenne

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-05-15 12:31:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
JCH, for me this was a mixed bag of much and little. The specifics you chose were so unalterable (in commission) that the truth/lie theory was all that was left. In the end, even rain water will fill every edifice, to drink it, or not, I guess has to do with filters- but we all will. That, obviously is not the point of your piece; but the thoughts of others, on whether necessity demands a greater commitment. In being here in America, I have learned one thing. A large portion of this community are not interested in the truth, they are interested in being right by whatever invention of idiocy/genius is thrust upon them. They are not interested in truth, they prefer the path to power. Those pundits who market half truths and obfuscated lies often believe what they are saying is truth. The truth of the matter is, the learning of disinformation can seldom be undone. An insightful piece.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2011-05-13 01:42:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
Hello James. I see you have an attitude going on :) You got me riled up though, so there's a plus! Theres a couple of 'skips' in there, but it reads a bit like childs play, until you realize the depth of this. First verse is excellent! Can I suggest something for the middle stanza? Notice that you used the word 'lie's twice? (Its interesting though cause you've got bedding down with lies.../...how the lies scatter)..maybe ..."how your dreams scatter" ? and also in that same verse, I think the word 'To' should either not be capped, or it should read "you' see things that matter.. Your title imply's that you are about to really be politically radical, but I can't see anything in the body of work that I might call American. Maybe you could use another verse? Or you could change the title. It seems to me that it needs something. Enjoyed! Thank you!

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