This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2011-06-12 16:48:55 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Finally Realizing Everyone Else Doesn't Own  Me

Copyright © June 2011 Mandie J Overocker

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-07-02 18:44:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Awesome Mandie - Great structure that captures the only message in this poem. Love it! There is nothing I would change or have any suggestions that would make this stand out it stands on it's own recognition. blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2011-06-30 10:23:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Bravo, what a wonderful accrostic, short, simple, succinct and what an impact your words have. Very well said and in such a delicious way. Bravo again! Lora (I think I'm going to steal your lines and use them as my motto)
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-06-13 14:52:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mandie, This is a fine acrostic poem. The words are powerful and even though short it says just what it has to and nothing more. However, I think there is a plethora of emotions in between the lines, not written but implied. It isn't always easy to stand your ground but it's necessary in order not to lose ourselves. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-06-12 18:19:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Mandie, so glad to see you back. What a fine powerful piece you presented us. The term Freedom is and eloquent metaphor for so much- the small and the large. Finally – Here is the journey come to fruition. The end that was not necessarily assured, but an end that for some will counter the forces that choose to misdirect. Realizing - all alone this tells the story of growth, of enlightenment, and a new direction. Everyone else – The exclusion is the author. There is a counter theme that allows for autonomy, though the practice has been curtailed in the past. The author, now she is not “everyone else” and it refers back to the self realization of “realizing”. Doesn’t own – here you define “everyone else.” They are those who believe the institution of humanity, at least in a personal interaction, must meet the definition they have of truth, or the utter servitude of others to the philosophy they themselves define. Me - Finally, we are to the “positive” the inverse view of “everyone else.” The distinction seems to come in that the personal realization is not pushed towards, “everyone else”, only that “Me”, the author is allowed the autonomy to choose. So much in so few words, good to read your verse.
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