This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2011-06-12 17:04:03 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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We Hide No More

Out on the mountain My soul finds it's home As on the path we travel Along on our own A hammock strung up Between two trees Provides safe place of slumber And all that we need The solace we find On the mountain side Gives us the strength To no longer hide

Copyright © June 2011 Mandie J Overocker

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-07-03 14:05:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mandie, there is a strenth in this piece, not of transcending but of finding oneself. The images are strong, and the "slumber" a scene to leave the soul. Indeed, the "path we travel" contains its own good and evil- but I am sure it must be noted that the trees, hammock and mountains, were probably a bit off the beaten path. One either had to choose the metaphor, or choose the setting for the metaphor. One had to go there or discover. I like this piece, and am always looking for that moment when necessity does not demand seclusion, rather, the chooses allow for the respite.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2011-06-28 14:34:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mandie, What are we hiding from? Just the truth about ourselves. And that does take moxie to see what and whom we really are. Nature is filled with answers. Thoughtful poem.. Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-06-13 08:30:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Mandie - Your imagery paints a place of solitude necessary to feed the soul. There is no hidden message in this poem - it's about peace of mind and I completely enjoyed the tender serene feeling it gave me. Nicely done, blessings, Deni
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