This Poem was Submitted By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2011-06-30 10:12:23 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Ripples of Time

Baby’s dancing on mist thinking its clouds rising up to heaven He brings the night of endless sleep within his warm and dark embrace as their souls are burning with screams  of paradise lost before it was found In shudder’s whisper two breaths brush past as pale moonlight lays scattering  across a stairway where stars fail to twinkle and beams no longer shine Baby is a rose scented petal drifting in scattered sun rays gently lifted on Springs Air de temps’  Passion He is a white blistered pale sky bleeding into night’s darkness They hear the melodious strains of the haunt that names their spirits in separation Sometimes one is so hard to do Sometimes—alone is all there is

Copyright © June 2011 Lora Silvey


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2011-07-03 14:14:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Lora, Lovely images, especially.......... Baby is a rose scented petal drifting in scattered sun rays gently lifted on Springs Air de temps’ Passion Alone we always are even with another. You have a way with words. good job, Dellena


This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-07-02 18:39:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Excellent piece Lora that leans towards the spiritual side with a tender meaning giving it the extra edge to make it a whole poem that embraces the reader and leaves a mystical feeling about it with them. You have the best talent with imagery - I'm in awe - of how you choose your words and pin them exactly where they should be. Very beautiful and well worth reading more than once. Kudos, on my list for June. blessings, Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-07-01 14:11:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Lora, it is a compelling title “Ripples in Time”. In my other writings I actuall discuss such on a technical level- so this title intrigued me. Your piece, of the specters (internal and external) that both create the passion and cause the loneliness is as close to an actual living, breathing dichotomy as an incident can be. It was compelling. From beginning to ending, each step was like the separated breaths; trying to grasp and contain while allowing for the free expulsion of the passion. “Sometimes, Alone is all there is” ends this piece with the writer longing for the previous experience, nevertheless. A tantalizing, and on some levels, heartbreaking piece.
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-06-30 17:15:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Hi Lora, Wow...this is a most impressive poem. Your words are lovely, expressive and evocative to say the least. I do believe it is the best poem I have read in a long time. The theme is creative and the manner in which you weave this story is fabulous. I have tried to pick a favorite line but one melds into the other making it impossible for me to chose one over the other. You are a gifted poet who should never stop posting your work for all to see. Bravo and a standing ovation. Best wishes, cheyenne
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