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To Stand in Truth I once believed there was no hope, no place to find a way to cope. With cruelties unspeakable and yet, deep inside never did we forget. Oh, how creative did we become when being threatened with a gun? Inside I split into many selves who carried the pain through all the hell. You ask me, ‘what inspires me so?’ Those parts inside I’ve come to know have courage and strength which they bear - more than ever I could even dare to imagine the horror they took on for me to survive this life with my sanity. I am in awe of their mighty fortitude; how can I express my immense gratitude? “Never give up!†Their motto through time, “stand firm in the truth, in yours and in mine. Hold fast to your dreams, to thy heart be true; together we stick to pull our way through.†So simple, it seems, but hard steps to take when faced with adversity looking to break the mind and the will, the spirit and soul; darkness consumes erasing the goal. “Stand firm in your truth; it starts with a Spark, for truth shines a light in the deepest dark.†Together they stood, and with them I’ll stand Sticking together, arm in arm, hand in hand. I know what to do to win this fight: hold fast to our dreams with all our might. With grace I will thank each part that has grown, holding them close, now we’re never alone. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-09-02 23:46:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84615
Hi Mandie -Powerful depth of emotions portrayed via a traumatic event
that happens in life - and those feelings are so hard to work at let alone write
about if the poem lends truth to the writer's life.
It is stark and has a good rhyming scheme but I see a few places where
if you omit words - and tighten up the poem it would stand out
and allow the reader to feel more impact through each verse.
Noted are your chosen words that lean towards hope, which is always
available for anything in the world.
you've been writing a lot this month,
it's nice to be able to read your work.
blessings,
Deni