This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2011-08-17 00:16:51 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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I'll Never Know

Listen! These Old Bones Underneath the Mask Where Darkness Lies creak and moan while Crying Eyes Fantasized Revenge by Integrating Night and Day. I Thought About You Today, about our Souls Running Free making Heavenly Connections. I thought I’d write you a Love Poem but our Torrid Affair was Poison Rising. As we were Creating and Dating, Debating A Shattered Moon, you challenged me To Stand In Truth. So my Recovered Soul alongside Black-Eyed Susans that cherish Truth and Freedom is  Becoming One. Finding Solace in Season from our Rantings of the Divided Mind while Reality’s Promise creates a Memorial of Innocence that will Feed Me and my Anger as Today, The Adult Child learns to let go. So I Cried for You Today when I saw you in that Tuxedo dressed up all nice, nowhere to go knowing that I’ll Never Know when you Speak Your Truth. .

Copyright © August 2011 Mandie J Overocker

Additional Notes:
The challenge was to write a poem using the title of our previous works...this includes 32 of mine...

This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-08-29 00:53:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mandie, I think you met the challenge well in this melancholy poem. You have penned some good phrases and even though I am not sure what all of them mean I do like the poem. Your ending was a surprise and quite powerful. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2011-08-19 13:59:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Consider the flow it seemed to get lost for this reader and felt your were writing to just write not to express the depth within..Sorry just my take.
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