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John 3:5

                                                                                You turn back, look,                                                                                 and see those piles of ash,                                                                                 then wonder how your footsteps                                                                                 avoided all that mess.                                                                                  You waited long enough to turn, and not be fried.                                                                                 You wonder: what power kept you balanced                                                                                 on it's side, alive, and let you abrogate                                                                                 its own decree? It loves you as a son,                                                                                 whose real Son paid your penalty.                                                                                  In this Evening Land the moon is hidden,                                                                                 the stars begin to hide. You shine your weapon,                                                                                 trying to capture the last light, turning your hilt.                                                                                 One century, a little more, past horseback,                                                                                 past candlelight and torch, the same weapon,                                                                                 same carriage, assigns, accoutrements,                                                                                 the Dragon, same. Turn the hollow words                                                                                 inside out: you possess them like your love,                                                                                 cherish them the same, in memory.                                                                                 What ignites you? The long shadow of the Church,                                                                                 with all the weight it carries, fed by irony                                                                                 and history, its bony fingers, relatives,                                                                                 and saints, a dark hooded thing behind you.                                                                                  You are Luther, Calvin, vital and spoken to.                                                                                  It could not sustain its carcass form, or you.                                                                                 Are you ready? It is your time to leave.                                                                                 When the water splashes into metaphor,                                                                                 You will wawl, then feel the Spirit breathe. 

Copyright © September 2011 Mark Steven Scheffer


This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-09-30 00:29:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
I'm fairly speechless after reading one of the best poems I've come across in a long time. I've no idea where to start because the whole of tis poem has such depth beyond the norm of a amateur writer that it's so hard to point out all the best lines in this. They are all inclusive and comprehensible with spiritual tones added in to take a reader to a dream like state - and want to stay there for a long time. You are my fav poet here, and you have outdone everyone of us with this poem. You own this; you have stood up and shown how your talent shines with every line in the memorable write. blessings to you once again for your continued skills in writing, Deni


This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-09-19 21:42:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
MSS- so we see the transformation; or maybe the stiff-necked in response to the responsive, I AM. I guess the use of Luther and Calvin, certainly progenitors of much of modern theology is apropos; for your poem is striking and medieval- even to the glint of the sword (I assume a duality, both of the word and an instrument of battle). It is always interesting to me that great men of God like D.L. Moody and Charles G Finney never make the final cut. In fact the voice of God, Billy Graham presided over far more conversions than any other man of God, in history; with a much different message than Calvin’s predetermination or Luther’s rational epistle of strict protocol. I guess the only reason I say anything at all along these lines is selfish. I am tired of Luther and Calvin getting all the press. Great men of God, yes; the end story- by no means. I know I am petty, but having read a quarter of their extensive tomes, I’ll have to say the biography and writing of Smith Wigglesworth was far more fetching for the believers spirit. I digress- back to your treatise; and in the end will baptism, the covenant of belonging- cure the ills or aggrandize the principles of theology and eschatology to bring about salvation or redemption in the end? The metaphor assumes so, long as the passion that wields the sword remains. Is that not so? I may, while inspired by your amazing writing ability, have struggled to identify “that power”, and the conveyance that allowed propitiation. Nevertheless, though some may say I am a sinner and unremarkable; I sometimes smile because within the borders of philosophy and scientific examination, I find I often see the deity more clearly than they might believe. I have not lost my faith; just ensured the vehicle is able to maintain it. I think; and regardless of all that, He Is.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2011-09-04 22:16:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
MSS You're a John Donne for the 21st century. I say that because it seems to me that this is fiery, ignited. Heathen that I am, you moved me with this. Sustained power here. But beyond that fleeting aberration, don't get your hopes up, sonny. Some of us are beyond redemption :) MAH
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