This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2011-12-09 22:36:11 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Tea Trade

             For Steph I keep a cup for you, it’s full of tea you like. It could be chai, or it could be that Bengal Spice you introduced me to when we were strangers. I didn’t know you were a cup yourself, and filled for me with liquor steeped of everything that you have seen and felt and love and loathe and do. I bring my lips to you and learn the sea you’ve sailed upon. And when my cup meets yours you sail, and reach my undiscovered shores.

Copyright © December 2011 Mark Andrew Hislop

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2011-12-24 16:59:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Mark, I'm so thrilled to see from your dedication, that your friend means so very much to you. The writing was absolutely lovely, life affirming showing the interconnection to each other brings out the whole of you. The tea idea was brilliant! Happy Holidays young man... Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-12-21 01:18:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
What a beautiful love poem. Enticing, erotic and sensual to each line you have written. Very clever verbiage with using "tea" to enhance the poem - and one lucky couple to drink from the cups - and sail on through life with love that seems endless. blessings, Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-12-16 21:43:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mark, for me it is Darjeeling, sweetest and bitter- but the love story held in the moment of this piece resounds beyond the tea. “undiscovered” is there ever a thing more tempting, more amicable to the soul? It reminds me of the book Mirror lake, so haunting yet within are the scrolls of love and devotion, discovery and mystery. “a cup yourself” I do wish I could sup with you; yet, I have in your words and images- that cross the plains of the soul to every reader. The hidden metaphor within, or not so hidden is sweet and the journey of the moment evermore so. A very fine piece- should Sinatra sing “strangers in the night” to mete your moment without?
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2011-12-15 03:12:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hello Mark, Quite a different type of write this is one--most enjoyable. Your metaphors are excellent and are full of promise and nuiance--all that lovers should have and look forward to. The joys shared, the game of discovery and all the delicious delights you lay out for us in this wonderful banquet of words that are placed ever so carefully. No ambiguiosity with this one. Excellent alliteration and rhyme... a truly fresh take on love and romance. Thank you for honoring us with this new style from your accomplished pen. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-12-14 18:34:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 7.00000
The Tea Trade For Steph I keep a cup for you, it’s full of tea you like. It could be chai, or it could be that Bengal Spice you introduced me to when we were strangers. I didn’t know you....... thinking of Steph as a cup of spiced tea is an excellent metaphor. She could be any kind of tea and you would love her just the same. Your eloquent words are beautiful were a cup yourself, and filled for me........ good enjambment here with liquor steeped of everything that you have seen and felt and love and loathe and do..... these lines express your thoughts to know everything about her, what she loves and what she hates I bring my lips to you and learn the sea........ She has taught you it's okay to trust her heart and yours, as well. Sometimes a death of love either by divorce or passing on makes one leery to try again. you’ve sailed upon. And when my cup meets yours you sail, and reach my undiscovered shores........ this couplet completes this wonderful poem nicely Your use of metaphor, enjambment, alliteration and successful rhyme makes this poem a joy to read. Bravo! Best wishes, cheyenne
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