This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2012-01-04 12:22:09 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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                                                                       they dissect each others' poetry                                                                        and consider changing an image                                                                        at the behest of someone who did not                                                                        feel the need when the poem was written                                                                        in the first place and who didn’t see                                                                        the wave (much less ride it) which                                                                        produced it,                                                                             yet,                                                                        the change made,                                                                          the poem is pronounced better                                                                        by the vanguard.                                                                          I don’t know . . .                                                                          but I had a nice time                                                                        smoking a butt                                                                        with the lady who                                                                        comes by                                                                        every 2:00 a.m.                                                                        EST                                                                          to mop                                                                        up.  

Copyright © January 2012 Mark Steven Scheffer

Additional Notes:
Definitely not about TPL. This place has always respected the individual, and has never been prone to the rewriting of others' poetry . . . as if a poem were a mere artifact, a useful household implement that can be bettered for some utilitarian or socially redeeming purpose, like getting published. TPL is not of that sort. Aside from the petty contest manipulation - even more odious than treating a poem as an implement (the socially redeeming aspect is gone there) - which is forgotten like the old Shakespearean hobby horse (but not by this elephant) . . . Anway, I thought poets wrote from their souls, and that each line and image was dictated by something essential. Even the failures or defects are of a piece, and part of the Design. And sometimes someone has to dump something and move on, spiritually and poetically. Rewriting - by other than the poet, who may be moved or REQUIRED - for whatever reason the Design has - to revisit the moment . . . rewriting by external forces is like molding shit. But what do I know? Or care how you answer that question.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2012-02-07 19:52:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
MSS Mmmmmmm......smoked butt. My favourite. MAH

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2012-01-26 15:24:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Give her my love.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-01-13 21:30:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
MSS, a scintillating verse; even more so the moment after. I have searched out far and wide the resumption of what would temper your verse; at one time there were two on AOL I swore by- and some I didn't- and there were Mirc sites and ... the multi-dimensional distribution in places I couldn't get to again even if I tried- and long ago.... in an internet far far away- was a sonnet site amidst the's and other puppy mills; then again- sort of like your cigarette (to this day I rue the day I quit, and laud the health I got) sometimes it is just enough to watch the cleaning lady about her business- although, at times, you agitate the hell out of me; there is nothing that stands in the gap better than a lap around a verse you have penned. Maybe it's that soul thing, maybe not- a great little treatise subsequent to your verse.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2012-01-12 08:57:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Happy New Year Mark - Some undertones of sarcasm noted - and truly hope this new year does not have me molding shit. I've done enough of that in my life time - but I am interested in the mop; more imagery on the mop - You are just the best so keep up the good work and never underestimate how pleasurable your words are to those of us who know and love you best here. blessings, Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2012-01-06 04:42:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Mark, This is something exquisite in its simplicity yet it speaks of so much. It is profound and well penned, easy to read with its smooth flow of continous thought. Most enjoyable--a definite truth put into fine verse, three cheers for you and your voice on this subject. L
This Poem was Critiqued By: Kimberly D Rowe-Van Allen On Date: 2012-01-05 04:56:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mark, Interesting work... I think poetry is about sharing what is inside, and if the reader can take something away from what you shared that is beneficial to them, whether it was the intent of the author or not, that is a good thing. Look forward to more from have my attention now! Kim
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