This Poem was Submitted By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2012-01-30 19:32:24 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Under Your Spell

Each time we meet though we don’t speak I read your body, see the heat in your eyes Oh yes, I feel the pulse smoldering just— as those jazzy blues begin to growl As you move closer  I know it isn’t easy  giving up your heart your wanting more yet, before I fall under your spell Stop—I need to say  I can’t be your one and only I can’t be the one whose name  you breathe as if a prayer I’m not the one for all time No, no, I’m not  the one for you I feel the fire when you brush my hand with yours Yes—you are wanting more  than I can give.  You’d be oh so easy  to touch, to breath, to taste,  I tremble, anticipation,  your breath searing my thoughts  to late to retreat Stop—I need to say  baby, I not your one and only,  not the one who’ll be there till the end of time, but if you still want to dance, then tonight we will dance

Copyright © January 2012 Lora Silvey

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-02-07 11:45:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Lora, so many images break into my soul. I would like to put this to music. The songs of past artists that reach me, particularly Bob Seeger’s – We’ve Got Tonight- and really many more. Of the author- you- I want more, you leave the moment with an engrossed audience- and the passion becomes unbearably trying, if indeed the reader takes the words you have written to heart. Blues are a passion of mine, -jazzy blues- as is smoldering jazz. It was as if I waded into a scene I wouldn’t delete from my DVR- I would keep it and watch it when the mood affected so. It brought to mind a Star Trek the Next Generation Scene with Number 1 and his sultry Minuet on episode – 11001001- which was quite sensous and the hollow deck scene is worth the viewing- just to anchor your words. A adored the piece. Can I say more?

This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-02-02 00:15:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Lora, I am glad to see you posting again. I can relate to this poem as I have 'no no' more than once. Some men think women are so needy they will agree to anything, well not all of us will. You have good alliteration in touch/ taste/ tremble/ thoughts. You word selection is expressive and evocative. This is a well penned poem with its liquid flow and the theme is compelling. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2012-01-31 14:22:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Lora...... If only you cut off before the very last word. one would be left hanging, wondering. Did she ? it just flowed along so well, an abrupt end w ou ld have stopped you in your tracks. That's my take. Lovely, smoldering. sounds like something's hot not cold anymore. good for you. Hubba hubba ding ding, dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Kimberly D Rowe-Van Allen On Date: 2012-01-31 07:57:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
Lora, Love this poem... I feel the longing, the reluctance, the pull toward what feels like an inevitable meeting and mingling between two people. I love how the work of another can give the reader gems that they can identify for themselves - so many lines here speak to me... Stop—I need to say I can’t be your one and only I can’t be the one whose name you breathe as if a prayer I’m not the one for all time No, no, I’m not the one for you This one touches me because I used to feel I could be this way for a certain someone, and now I don't think I have it in me anymore. Intense. Thanks for sharing your work. Kim
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