This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2012-03-06 10:45:38 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The telling feathers all around   strewn in clumps upon the ground My scolding rebuke and aiming point   dismaying kitties in earnest taunt Til not so far away a limb unsettled                                from above Labored wings and a fleeing dove   to clinch with certainty to decide One plop of dunk as white as snow. 

Copyright © March 2012 James C. Horak

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-04-02 16:54:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.70000
JCH, if I were to say I liked this piece I would be as so many are. I am more ambigious towards the construction and format. The analogy of the purity of snow and bird shit is an interesting one. I think, it is more that moment that kept me beyond the entirety of the piece. Of scolding or rebuke? I have little to say on the subject. I would like to feign inconsonance towards such thoughts, but I usually believe, for good or bad, justice is what one makes of it. I know there is BAD injustice, but that is not what I refer to, and I believe this piece refers to- such is seldom what life affords- and never in anonymity. Harm is usually harm accepted, I don’t normally allow that acceptance. Sometimes, in my evil way- I find it all too amusing. I critiqued a poem this month, got no reply and a poor score. I found it amusing- not disconcerting. As for somebody being considered a “kittie” well it would not be the first time the harsh judgment of cunt was leveled at me. Here kittie, kittie, kittie. As I said, I’d like to say I really liked this piece, but, well- its not my flotsam peace or litter.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2012-03-27 16:03:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James, A plop of dunk! I love my cat too but hate him chasing and catching a bird. I'm glad when he fails. He;s a very successful mouser though. cute poem, liked the rhyme and alliteration. Sorry, I can't pick on anything...... Good day! Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2012-03-07 10:34:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
So good to see a work from you James, have missed your poems. I'll probably be way off in left field with my take on this however I enjoyed the read and the thoughts it evoked. Seems to me that one must get tired and bored of having to repeat themself when the listeners all too soon appear to forget what has gone before, is it repetitive or redunant--oh my, sometimes they seem the same and I become confused. The turn of attitude in your second stanza is delightful--such a nice way of stating the fact and I love the closing line...LOL, how true, how true. I do hope this means a resurgence of posts on your part. Looking forward to seeing more from you. Lora
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