This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2012-06-23 15:44:31 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Circles in Time

Lingering with and amongst shadows permits the everyday Sun to pass over the very essence of life. Years pass and the mere  mention of living  feels like bolts of lightning  piercing to the core of unexplainable sad thoughts. Life suspended in imaginary space which could only be spent in finding its way to merely breathe through it. An absolute cannot do it  as much as the desire to feel again was nothing came and she couldn’t pretend. Spirits which came to beg, inspiring ideas to force out the dread; wishing some release from the dead were blinded by the gnawing grief. Pain weaving in and out like thread through cloth. Any material would do to numb her emotions with sewing time in pieces wondering if anything could end or allow her heart to mend. Hoping for so long that contrary to popular belief hearts can heal from wounds that steal much too much of life itself.

Copyright © June 2012 DeniMari Z.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-07-07 12:42:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hello again Deni. This is so sad its hurting my soul just to I do...I like the thought of the lightning bolts because thats how I have felt at times. This life has alot of pain and sorrows. For me it is regrets...regrets I didnt do better, didnt change things, wasnt there...etc.. Its hard to remember, and harder to express, but somehow we have a responsibility to each other, to spread some joy around. A little can go a long way for restoring the darkness to light again. Hope your situation is improving!!! I think you have written a well developed free style piece, and your ability to express is obvious. Thanks for hanging in there!! ~smiles~ Ellen

This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-06-28 10:22:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi have written an emotional charged poem. I am no stranger to grief and one thing I have learned is that it never goes away. However, in time one learns how to handle it and only visits the pain occasionaly. Your word choices are expressive and compelling. Your phrasing is impeccable providing an easy read. Well done! Best wishes, cheyenne
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