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This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-04-13 17:02:10 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Kiss

The kiss can be a prelude to a great meny things. Of a frendship as yet undiscovered. Or the promise of lustful possibilties. Maybee even the beginning of lives forever intertwined till the sweet reclamation of life's end. A kiss is the souls'way of saying hello. So raise your lips to mine and let us press ever so slightly. Let our kiss for a while be our only method of touch. So much is said by so little flesh. Determining moments, memories, destinies.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2013-05-22 14:11:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Joe, forgive this late review. I so enjoyed your choice of verbiage and the easy flow of your poem. You've created a delightful moment in time and also given your reader something to ponder...excellent and most enjoyable read. Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ashni Irey On Date: 2013-05-01 01:33:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I LOVE the lines A kiss is the soul's way of saying hello. I like the theme and the flow of this poem, but I'm finding the punctuation making the read difficult. I would line the words a little differently - Let our kiss for a while be our only method of touch. Just as an example. The last 4 lines seem like a summary of everything written earlier. I am not sure they are necessary to the poem at all. I think your message and sentiment are stronger captured by the preceding lines and if you wrote it out with the right pauses inbetween, it will make a beautiful poem. Good work. :)

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