This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2013-08-21 22:58:09 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Man Sipping Coffee from a Saucer A styrofoam cup not even a handle
chickens raised in dark not even a candle
(Once even the eggs were and yet)
you can't find a straight bone on a bet
Corn that looks so luscious
and yet can give you a virus
Children given e colli eating out
with high tech fixes about
Excusing and not fixing shit
While nostalgia becomes
man sipping coffee from a saucer |
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Copyright © August 2013 James C. Horak
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-08-31 11:00:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Visually stunning. Yes the world has changed and we wonder why many seemed to be OK with food that can kill us. Short cuts that cost us more then we can imagine. Your poem spells it out nicely
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2013-08-22 19:14:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
The title is eye catching which is the best part of being enticed to read a poem.
The depth in your piece colorfully describes in poetic form how we're suppose to proceed with caution to everything we handle now to avoid experiencing any ill repercussions of what we do -
but there is more depth in this piece - more towards where society in general needs to react with appropriate measures and not excuse the extent of how much we've to be concerned about now.
Very clever and I do hope you enlighten me to this particular line,
"Once even the eggs were and yet)
you can't find a straight bone on a bet"
Well done - I enjoyed this poem.
DZ
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