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This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-08-26 11:52:37 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Morning

The morning touches me like an apologetic lover Her gray and wistful eyes promise the softness of rain Her wind is breath on my skin sweet with love warm with possibilities Though her I walk my feet not noticing the earth My coat tails are tugged at by invisible, insistent hands My solid form slowly turns to liquid liquid gives way to vapor that is lost amid her whisperings

This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2013-09-03 11:58:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Of course, being egotistical, I would suggest appreciative instead of "apologetic" lover. I like very much the images of "my feet not noticing the ground" and "liquid gives way to vapor". The reader is going to want to know more about this affair...that's your real success. JCH

This Poem was Critiqued By: Kimberly D Rowe-Van Allen On Date: 2013-09-02 18:47:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joe, I like the imagery of this poem. I am so not a morning person, but it makes me want to be one...it arrives to greet me gently and sweetly and allows me to meld with and begin my day. Thank you for sharing.

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2013-09-01 23:31:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
This is a clever poem with an intro that draws a reader in yet somehow at the same time while reading on I was a bit confused of where your message was taking me. Realizing that all writers use words that specifically mean something (that the reader doesn't always find) I would love it if you would expand more of the message in this piece. Good choice of words, flows nicely but I felt like I missed something by the end of it unless the poem was about morning and how it makes you feel. Deni

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