This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2014-01-18 21:44:58 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Worthy of Saving

I am the well Expelled From deep within From once came sin Now truth exposed  In burning light We all unite Opposing forces  Once at odds Come together Rising for a cause Rise up, Rise up From the depths Into the light No more to fight For every breath  Or the right To live your life For each of us As all are one Are precious gifts  Deserving love Security from within We’ll find inside ourselves To face the world Which once betrayed We’ll soon learn Can too be true Providing space To heal with grace  In loving arms And warm embrace Of those untouched By deception’s reach We’ll find securely What we seek So rise up, rise up And welcome in  The light of love  From those who win Untouched by death  And darkness they’ve been Let go of your dance with sin

Copyright © January 2014 Mandie J Overocker

Additional Notes:
It has been a while since I've written here, or anywhere really. This piece is the product of a process of growth and learning to love myself/ourselves by letting go of the hold the past has had in our lives. Words can not do justice to describe this process - this piece was written about 15 hours following a very cathartic dinner conversation with a friend at which point I had felt so broken and damaged, beyond repair, not worthy of saving. After talking with my art therapist that night, I went to bed feeling drained and depleted. In the morning I prepared to go to a session with my art therapist and as I was driving to the appointment, I began to become aware that I did not feel so depleted, or damaged. During the session, we reviewed an art piece I had done 24 hours earlier and determined that the piece was very expressive of how things were going internally. This poem was the result of looking at that art piece and allowing whatever came to mind to bubble up. My art therapist witnessed our process of writing this during the session and described it as though someone was transcribing morse code. From my perspective it was like hearing a foreign language just writing it automatically. For most of the writing I was not looking at what I was writing, rather at the painting or we had our eyes closed in order to better hear what was being "said" inside. A picture of the painting can be seen here:

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2014-01-31 01:24:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Strong emotional poem that reads so well and I love the where the inspiration came from for this piece I was reading along enjoying the passion you've put in to this but IMO at this part of the poem it got a little uneven with flow - (We’ll find inside ourselves - inside could be removed To face the world Which once betrayed We’ll soon learn Can too be true Providing space To heal with grace In loving arms And warm embrace Of those untouched By deception’s reach We’ll find securely I would go with - We'll find ourselves free again from betrayal we have faced providing space healing with grace in loving arms that embrace those untouched by deception's reach we will find security I was just playing around with your wonderful words - Very profound poetry that left this reader feeling encouraged - blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2014-01-26 10:17:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Reads like a chant, or mantra. Very uplifting. Above all else for me this poem was an easy read. It is good to know that you are back writing and back on the TPL. I look forward to reading more of your work
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2014-01-23 14:52:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Mandie, of the content, there is the spiritual journey only you can address; that you are still writing is the product of some level of victory. Your last line held a particular image for me, "let go of your dance with sin", and since it is far more subjective to each person, rather than objective- the reader may look at you and decide, and it is inconsequential, then they must turn their eyes on themselves, with regard to the entire content, and make that decision in accordance with their subjective views. This is a very insightful piece, and with the character throughout, there is also hope throughout. At times that was more difficult to find in your verse than not. I enjoyed the read and am glad you have posted your heart.
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