This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2014-02-02 19:37:41 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Feeling This Season

Winter, you have tipped your dark hat toward trees leaving black lace within my view. Triple shivers as I wake in first rush of morning warm coziness of my gown deadens my sensitivity to your sensation feels snug against your icy presence circling this season around me. Winter, you are biting yet enchanting stream of shorter days where daydreams have a place making notions of my dreamer’s soul feel gracious that your season is now not just dreary; more a spell cast for those who desire to play in the wintry zone. Winter, you calm me in the evening allowing a hasten to a place with dreams again in the ways that I know I am protected against anything as cold as you or dark as your black lace. Sheltered through out the eve in peaceful sleep ‘till morning brews an inviting taste of your warm hospitality.

Copyright © February 2014 DeniMari Z.

Additional Notes:
Originally posted as Invitation to Winter - another old poem that I've rewritten and feel more confident about -


This Poem was Critiqued By: Terry L Krieg On Date: 2014-02-25 16:44:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hello Deni, the season is exceptional in your poem. It is a good way to view the good and the bad of it all. I feel your description very much. T


This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2014-02-10 10:09:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
DeniMari, it is a fine image; you begin with romance on a personal scale. Then in the second stanza, approach the broader definition of romance. Being one who always has an affinity for winter (well, it seems for whatever season takes my moment), your personalization of the season was both appreciative of the nature, and distinctive in your color commentary. Your use of black lace, gown, snug, sensation, takes our experience and canters it with enchanting, daydreams, spell cast and biting, which although are human compliments, are attributed to the engendering of the season. I really liked this piece. You final lines, of peaceful sleep and warm hospitality both counter and augment the images. Well done.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2014-02-03 21:59:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
As well you should feel confident in your poem. It sets into motion so many images and ideas I had not considered.That because of the shorter days we have more opportunity to dream. To stay in and write. To know the absolute perfection of warmth away from her black lace
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