This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2014-06-14 13:49:22 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Bubbles
What if we are all but bubbles
floating on the air of
our expectations
some higher, some lower,
all hoping to float
on the wind, forever
Perhaps even to merge with
other bubbles
to become
less fragile
We are all riding a breeze that
seems to know where
it is going
What if we are bubble soap
held within a ring
And that God
is but a delighted child
waveing us into exsistence |
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Copyright © June 2014 Joe Gustin
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ashni Irey On Date: 2015-08-25 09:28:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I've played with bubbles when I was a kid. Loved making them in all sizes, making two or three stick together and see how they managed to maintain their balance and float through the air until they hit the wall and were no more. I feel this poem is remarkable in that it takes a very ordinary fun activity and puts it in a very spiritual context. So many thoughts provoked in my mind.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2014-07-05 10:26:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Oddly, coming late to this critique; I just today watched a fine video of a show from a bubble expert – see link. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ryGMG06sd38
So, allowing for the absolute providence of the moment- gave me more inspiration to apprise the present situation and the verse I am reading.
I don’t know about bubbles, I do know about bubble bursts. I have had them, everyone has had them, so the possibility of a person (or a persons “callout” maybe soul related), being a bubble, links with the human interaction and condition.
Life (is that the riding on the wind?), is much like that. Treasure what is; to avoid the burst is to quit living. I know how delightful your last stanza is. So maybe it acts as another callout; for the reader to find and treasure.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2014-06-17 18:59:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
If I had to choose I'd rather be a bubble than a "Bobble Head"...interesting write -
Your poem has a very light tone in it - to be carried so lightly as such - and not 'Pop'
3rd verse pulls the poem together with a touching sentiment -
Different than your other poems but well worth the read -
I hope that God is delighted of the child who embraces his existence and gives him thanks each day.
blessings,
Deni
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