This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2014-06-18 14:10:20 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Seventh Bridge To Cross

How faraway are you?   Measured in miles and years? Do you come often?    Then brush away my tears. You who lived so effortlessly keeping my heart with you always. To me who lived on hopelessly  coming face to face with reality. Accepting my worst fear now living to gather my blessings feeling them year to year. There can be no more merciless acts upon me   or nightmares that will change my personality. The living curse which was my worst I can finally proclaim   nothing bad will make me feel any more of the same pain.

Copyright © June 2014 DeniMari Z.

Additional Notes:
7th year - August 6th, 2007 - I am still a beginner of grief over the loss of my son.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2014-07-05 10:59:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Business; were it mine, I’d change “lived on” to “lives on”, to correct the tense and bring it to a current feeling. Deni, as with all loss, I feel for yours. That the impact of a child lives on, no matter how many years is as much a tribute to the person, as it is to the elasticity of life. Getting older, I find (somehow I didn’t expect it, weird) that I spend an inordinate amount of time at funerals- those close to me, and those close to others. However; nothing is the same as the loss of a child. You have brought us all along with you. I treasure the trust you place in us. I am sorry couldn’t reply earlier; you have probably waited. I do now.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2014-06-19 23:18:07
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I have had lost in my life so far from beyond So far from anything reasonable that my mind or heart still can not touch it I have known the lost of comfort so perfect that since she left I have felt nothing similar, or so close to the mark since then Yet somewhere in me I know that she still loves me all these miles away in all these seconds since her departure I know that Love still wins In other words I understand
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