This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2014-11-14 17:04:00 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Circe's Island

                                                                                                           You are the reason for Circe in the old tales.                                                                                                            I watch what once were men now wander through                                                                                                             your glade, brushed by the grass, blind to your magic.                                                                                                            I say your name and the wind stops to blow,                                                                                                            and starts to burn. I sprinkle something                                                                                                            mother gave me, from a jar,                                                                                                            and watch it fire in the dusk light:                                                                                                            She gave it to ward off half-daughters                                                                                                            of men. It keeps me balanced between                                                                                                            the angels and your minion beasts, who                                                                                                             wander, wandered from now to                                                                                                            then.  Yet I do not want to be                                                                                                            human anymore. I want to succumb,                                                                                                            so I wait for the jar to empty.                                                                                                             I should have stayed with the ancient                                                                                                             ones on the ships, sitting and looking                                                                                                             and chanting into the separation, the island                                                                                                             going dim, listening to the unseen waves                                                                                                            gasping eerily upon your                                                                                                             shore. 

Copyright © November 2014 Mark Steven Scheffer


This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2014-12-03 15:58:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Sir, I have circle around to this piece, probably ten times. I have begun an assessment several times. The desire to succumb, to let go and be lost to the need; the harachai to the sea nymphs, but I must say, aside from the mythological intemperance, comes the need to mitigate, day in and day out, that which calls the soul to impropriety, or discovery, as you will. The metaphor for living, or making ones way through life is a great one. I remember when the harachai chose possible shame and destruction to meet the glory- or Ulysses being tied to the mast to save himself and yet meet the wonder of the Sirens. I cannot say equivocally, but I believe that whenever it all comes to a head; it may be those who took the leap, to whatever end, are the heroes of the story.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2014-11-21 14:31:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Sounds like a place poets should go when their low on inspiration, and drowning in to many words that have no place to call home. Imagery was excellent.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2014-11-21 00:52:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I do not want to be human anymore. Something I distantly can relate to since I outcast myself so long ago, just playing, ever a part of the constant as ever. Circe the goddess of magic I believe. A magical writing. Something I greatly appreciate and admire(your writing that is), I am too concrete and pedestrian to actually believe in magic and I have always felt that anything supernatural would thus never waste its time on me. Nonetheless, I greatly appreciate your artistry as something between Mozart and Tool, meaning, at least to me, this was wonderfully and expertly crafted for everyone and anyone as long as they take the time to think about it. If they don't then it really doesn't matter, their jar is empty. Well written, thankfully posted. Medard
This Poem was Critiqued By: Marcia L McCaslin On Date: 2014-11-14 19:02:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Ok, Mark—I can only try—give it my best shot. First, I appreciate a work like this, all cobbled up poetically between myth and some truth maybe and allegory. Something in me does get lulled. Something in my spirit does understand, but I have just realized I write doggerel & for us doggerel folks, we are somewhere lagging way behind LOL. Not that I mind. I read on Wiki about Circe and what she did with people and men and animals and seems to me she was evil, and yet people who love mythology (I went to college with a gal that did), they find something there that like you say you don’t want to be human anymore. The half-daughters, ok, I kind of understand by ready Circe’s magical powers. I do kind of wonder what your mother had to do with it—if she already knew what you would need from the jar, but again, I’m sort of a simple person who rhymes slade with paid and calls it good LOL. But your work is always challenging and it deserves a much better critique than I could ever give it, except to say, the unseen waves do rock me and I do get a sense of lulling and other-wordiness from it. Thanks for posting.
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