This Poem was Submitted By: Marcia L McCaslin On Date: 2015-01-05 11:27:56 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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A Love Story

A sweet Boston girl fell in love with a cowboy With big calloused hands and a genuine smile And kindly grey eyes that spoke softly of rain clouds Of enduring love that would conquer each trial She said “yes” of course when he did pop the question And after the wedding, they headed out west Where he had a homestead with a cabin he’d built Five years of ‘proving up’ settled the rest To say there were hard times would not tell the story Their first-born, at four months, succumbed to the chill, Some cattle and sheep could not take the blizzards And the snow piled way up beyond the broad sill But spring did come and with it new courage Vegetables sprang up and newborns arrived Foals frisked and lambs played in tall grass of fescue Neighbors helped neighbors and everything thrived More children came; they shored up the cabin They added more rooms ; they put up a loft They built up more shelter for all of their livestock His love was strong and hers remained soft A school house went up on a nice summer’s day The men brought their tools and the food—a delight One of the women said she’d be the Teacher So the School of the Prairie was launched overnight Years passed and with them, the ups and the downs The couple grew old, except not in their hearts She still was his sweetheart from all those years back He still was the fire in her innermost parts A sweet Boston girl fell in love with a cowboy With big calloused hands and a genuine smile And kindly grey eyes that spoke softy of rain clouds Of enduring love that would conquer each trial

Copyright © January 2015 Marcia L McCaslin

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2015-02-07 10:09:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marcia, I have a personal hankering for a good love story! Sometimes the references are self-perpetuating and that is the best image of the whole- sort of like this story. You never tell us if you are related to the participants, yet you spin a story that was common, even the enduring love, at another time in this country’s time line. It makes me wonder, and wander, for the time to be alive in harder and simpler times. “Innermost parts” a wonderful turn of phrase, like the life they led, both simple, yet complex. I enjoyed the read, would have liked to know the people!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2015-01-16 00:54:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
My first instinct was to modernize this story but it was and wasn't necessary--it is universally about life, whenever, whatever, though easily applicable to our own history. Straightforward, beautiful, perfect love, the requisite tragedy, the redeemable loving imagery, life's and God's redemption of man and woman and family and community, perfectly written, completely spoken, from such a beginning to such an end. Wonderfully and in such picturesque words spoken (and, I apologize, for some reason, I thought of the same sweetness of "Back to the Future III"). Something too lovely for someone like me to create or imagine. Thank you for sharing your splendid imagination. Sorry for the imagery redundancy, just couldn't come up with better words. Sans Thesaurus. Thanks for posting. Mark
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2015-01-10 20:40:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
A picture of humility, humble beginnings and staying the course to build a wonderful foundation to live on. It's a good write - the only thing I would say is you do what I do when I write - My structure is off - and one of my mentors here told me in order to have a poem make a complete impact - structure is important - Not every beginning of a line should start with a capital letter - took me quite awhile to grasp so many parts of poetry - This poem allowed me as the reader to escape to another place in time with your chosen words that portray exactly what you wanted it to - blessings, Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-01-09 00:26:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I said it once and I will say it again. You my lady are a story teller. A preacher of tales most beautiful and that is a cowboy I would follow
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