This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-01-09 00:17:52 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Right now Right now my friends
it is the war of the pens
Let it out number the bombs
surpass all the acid of politics
belittle the stupidity of kings
Right now we need the voices
of strangers speaking
a common language
a dialect of the future
Right now is the time
for brave hearts to raise forth
to make with the effort
to put forth a try
Right now is the now
of Dr KIng
The moment of Lennon
the beautiful mpossibility of
of love without a
leash |
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Copyright © January 2015 Joe Gustin
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2015-01-22 17:08:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I Joe. I think this needs a good edit. That said- it is very passionately wrought. Sometimes when reading a piece such as this, I wonder what is going through the authors mind, why the dissertation, what motivates the explosive combinations.
I find it very interesting (since you linked MLK with John Lennon) that the right of the heart, of bravery comes to the forefront. It might be easily deterred by those with less imagination, but the dreams were never far from the minds of either of those personages.
My favorite, “dialect of the future” what a fabulous image!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2015-01-16 01:19:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I think I get it but of course any submitted writing, especially poetry is subject to almost any interpretation. Je suis Charlie. The freedom of speech, the freedom of the press, the freedom of writing, and the freedom of thought are the most important freedoms mankind has ever had even if I or we do not agree with all that is expressed. That is the absolute beauty of it, it is both from God and from humanity. It allows us to come together and agree and it allows us to separate and disagree, but prayfully in peaceful and civilized ways (if possible).
This Poem was Critiqued By: Marcia L McCaslin On Date: 2015-01-09 13:21:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joe, the title has an urgency about it that whets my curiosity instantly. It is not the type of title one says—“oh, I’ll read ‘RIght Now’ later”. The short staccato lines are sort of urgent and to-the-point like the old teletype machines —short little blips with messages of importance. It is direct and dart-like until the soft and beautiful ending which re-funnels the whole tone—“the beautiful impossibility of love without a leash. I think a person will read this rapidly for the reasons stated above, and then go back and study the lines and let them slowly do their work. Very nice. Thanks for posting.
Marcia
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