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If I Should Speak

You speak of me—foolish      for I give my enemy      shelter and repast without      restriction or reserve It is not in me to harbor      malice, how better to teach      the values of love if I      do not embrace love’s virtue Remove this worldly cloak      so that I might not stumble      or in error—falling short      thus to be left found wanting Lift this curse, which imprisons      me, a barrier to truth      so none be lost for lack of      pronouncement or by self-choice If by ignorance, the most      precious gift given be squandered      let the seeds of hope and of      life everlasting—proclaim                His Kingdom     Copyright 01/17/2015 by L.lora (Lora Silvey) 

Copyright © January 2015 Lora Silvey

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ashni Irey On Date: 2015-07-24 01:09:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I went through a phase where I wasn't sure whether forgiveness was a virtue or a weakness. I like this poem because it describes what goes through the minds of those who forgive freely and some who look upon those who do as weak. Very strong emotions and nicely written.

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2015-01-22 15:49:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I love this poem Lora - truly written with the message of compassion - to forgive and allow your spirit not to harbor ill feelings toward any man is a tremendous blessing to have instilled in to your soul - We live among so many who harbor anger, resentment, trivial petty injustices for the lack of wanting peace in their lives - we live among those who can't see past their complaints of daily life to enjoy a day - We live among the dark souls who spoil life with violence, cruelty with self-serving purposes that take them no where except around and around to where they started. Very refreshing to know that you have the wisdom, the words and the capability to write such honest and poetic words - On my list, blessings, Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2015-01-21 16:22:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Lora, welcome- and wonderfully done! Business- S2L4 I think L2 / L3 speaks of how to teach values of love L4 seems to contradict the reasoning. Ex. L2 how better may I teach L3 the values of love than to L4 embrace love’s virtue (Maybe I’m just missing the connection) This is a very fine use of language. I found each word choice to be distinct and uplifiting in it’s lesson. I don’t think I would alter a single reference. You are too kind utilizing (ignorance), personally I have found ignorance is seldom the problem, but the solution you propose is a powerful one. A very fine start to my readings. Enjoyed it very much.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-01-19 09:34:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
A poem of faith is a difficult thing to write without sounding like every other poem of faith. Yet you do create such a poem with a completely unique voice. even to the point of removing the earthly cloak, if that should better serve HIM. This is a poem not of a follower, this is a poem of a disciple. Well done
This Poem was Critiqued By: Marcia L McCaslin On Date: 2015-01-18 12:35:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Lora, what a wonderful surprise to see a new-to-me name and fine expression of poetry. It is lovely, and deep and reverent and honest. For someone familiar with the Bible, it is verse after verse of the Christian message put into your own unique syntax “Remove this worldly cloak” suggests a feeling we all have, as if, we had to wear big clumsy gloves to fix a watch. How much better we could work without the worldly cloak. “Lift this curse, which imprisons me,” expresses the same idea, and we all feel it at times, like the dreams we have where we are trying to run fast in sand and we get nowhere. I think the first verses make a perfect pedestal for the last, which is a gem, and again for Bible believers we are always subject to the ignorance (& maybe lack of discernment) that squanders the most precious gift. I have thrown my pearls to swine countless times and hated myself afterward BUT I have no doubt that the “seeds of hope” and of “life everlasting” do and will continue to proclaim His Kingdom. Brava! Marcia McCaslin
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