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This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-10-16 16:24:33 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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For Mum

Dearest Mother thank you for never being a mummy dearest For being the kind of mother I am always bragging on I remember when we your children would give you fresh dandelions each and every spring You always treated them as if we gave you the finest French roses I remember all the crimes of my youth How bees stung and falls would hurt you respected my pain while you chased the evil away with a coo and a kiss I will always know the hearth that was my home And will forever find no matter how lost I get the shores of your love

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2015-11-04 13:11:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Joe, I believe sentiments that are universal should be spoken as such; even if there is a personal touch to them. You did this well. It is not the product of this site to edit, so I won’t; that said, S1L3 is a reference many may not understand, from an obscure movie most in this modern time have not seen. My suggestion would be replace it with “an abusive mother”. I loved the fresh dandelion line, maybe I’ll have to repost my very old berry poem. Stanza 2 inspires me. Stanza 3, (as I said, you made the personal universal- it is a good deed! “Coo and a kiss” a well said image. Mother, mother, mum- it’s mostly the same for us all, and you captured it so well!! Great job.

This Poem was Critiqued By: charles r pitts On Date: 2015-10-25 01:55:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
what a wonderful tribute! a person's relationship with their mother is probably the most important on in life. you are lucky to have such warm and loving memories. i can't say that i can claim such as yours, and i dare say that many of the problems i've had in life stem from the lack of such a relationship. I hope your mum is still alive and well. I have only one suggestion--in the 3rd stanza your use of the word "crimes" to describe bee stings and pain. maybe a word like "tears" or "injustices" or something--but it's just an humble offering. a great homage to a great lady!

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2015-10-17 11:02:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Beautiful tribute to your Mum Joe - Mothers hearts are warmed by every small gesture a child brings to her world - Love comes first in to a heart of a Mother; and so many other things follow - The end of this piece captured me; it is new and refreshing - and I always love when I read something that comes straight from the writers heart - Simply amazing, as amazing as I imagine her to be - Blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Wanda S. Thibodeaux On Date: 2015-10-16 23:59:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.50000
Joe, this is awesome, just a precious memorial to you Mum. It flows beautifully as free verse, has imagery and passion. I'll bet you just took a seat and wrote this straight from the heart, no hesitation. That's how it sounds to me. "I will always know the hearth that was my home and will forever find no matter how lost I get the shores of your love." That is a very moving stanza, I really love it. Great post!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2015-10-16 17:57:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 6.00000
Joe, thank you for such a delicious and warm read. You put a smile on this reader's face, such loving sentiments metered out in just the right cadence and with such a delicate choice of verbiage with out being mushy. A most enjoyable read, wouldn't change a thing...best always. Lora

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