This Poem was Submitted By: charles r pitts On Date: 2015-10-25 08:19:35 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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full-grown baby

how did you ever grow so large covered in such thin skin? i gotta bottle and a paci  waitin just for you  open up and i'll pop one in you appear to me  to be near sixty no need to pitch  such a childish hissy it makes you look  like a big sissy all pouty and callin' names maybe it's just that your diaper is full or perhaps you're just so gassy get a change or a burpin'  or let one rip those options are far more classy i guess the best thing that i can do is steer so very clear of you and your ripped-off, plagiarized, copy-cat, ego-driven, amateurish, wannabe, sideshow, drivel you couldn't sell  for an old plug nickel to a traveling circus  you one-trick pony of a hack.  and by the way--have a nice day! 

Copyright © October 2015 charles r pitts

Additional Notes:
"All you need is love. All you need is love. All you need is love, love. Love is all you need." -The Beatles

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2015-10-30 19:05:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I detect a strong hint of sarcasm in your words - Sometimes adults never really outgrow their childish ways - the are molded and set then throw it all out to unsuspecting people- This is humorous as well, noted in the words you've chosen to write this - Good read, blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Wanda S. Thibodeaux On Date: 2015-10-30 00:45:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.53846
Hello again, Charles...getting rid of a little angerrrrrrrrr...I see. I cracked up at how you got more and more blown up until your mouth was so full of words...they just seemed to boil out at this point and your tirade was finished. I thought it was hilarious. Oh well, you did say: "have a nice day! So, I'm saying 'nice job.' You said it all and very well too.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-10-28 20:15:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I would not want to be on your bad side. Pissing off an excellent poet would not be the way to go. As for the poem you draw some excellent parallels with newborns and older folk. They almost all the same features except of the innocence. A well directed poetic back hand to someone who must have richly deserved it.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2015-10-26 13:37:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Charles – I entered into this critique with a bit of trepidation. First, it seemed to be a piece that is satirical, for an older person. Then I conceived it might be for a curmudgeon, back into diapers again; and not happy with the whole aging thing, and not happy that he/she needs attendees. Then again, I figured after several readings that it was both satirical, but also an infant analogy for any older adult who finds dealing with any uncomfortable occurrence, a difficult thing and lashes like an infant; inclusive of the need for a pacifier, and with a resemblance to an infant who is uncomfortable and not taken care of quick enough. I guess either of those scenarios will do, but the image stays with the reader- and yes;…. I’d prefer not to attempt the diaper changing myself. A very interesting … scene.
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