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Copyright © October 2015 Wanda S. Thibodeaux
My Father's Hand (Words of an unborn child)
My father's hand
is gentle as my tiny, unborn smile
welcomes his loving touch.
As he massages me,
my mother's hand finds his and they
both rest their palms upon
my slight form.
I cannot speak but my heartbeat
answers their love
and we are united.
I am warm...
bound to these people
who will cherish me
all the lovely days of my life.
Nurtured by her warm body...
I am growing stronger.
Soon I will be in their arms,
three hearts will swell with love.
We will be a family.
Previously posted on the Allpoetry website.
Wanted to post a positive view that an unborn infant might have. Pray that this would happen most often.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2015-11-02 23:31:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.72727
Love the message in the poem that flows gently creating your imagery very nicely.
Beautiful and unique - truly inspiring read -
This Poem was Critiqued By: charles r pitts On Date: 2015-11-01 21:19:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.71429
What a wonderfully creative topic! What expecting parents haven't wondered what their child in the womb thinks and feels? I like the line "I cannot speak but my heartbeat answers their love..." Can you incorporate the "kick" in this one? Maybe include it with the heartbeat? "I cannot speak but my heartbeat
answers their love" adding something like "I reach for them, their touch, their warmth..." and the union could come when the parents feel the infant's response. Just suggestions mind you...this is truly a lovely piece!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-11-01 07:20:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
What a warm and wonderful post. This was my first poem to read on this fine Sunday morning. The poem says so much without being political. Using the power of love to make its powerful point. Beautiful
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2015-11-01 02:38:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Another well thought out and excellently scripted
offering from your accomplished pen. Your descriptive
word choices along with the way you've presented them;
lends to an easy flow and creates a warmth for the unity
of which you speak. No suggestions, well done and very
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