This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-11-21 00:01:08 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Masquerade Evil is lazy
Only evil would shoot people
in the back while they
were busy rocking out
Evil does not want to make
a commitment or do the work
of really changing the world
of truly making a difference
Stupid is what stupid does
They would rather flick a finger
then raise a hammer or
place a brick
Evil is nothing more then
misplaced loyalty to
a dumb ass truth
dancing to an off beat tune
Murderers masquerading as soldiers |
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Copyright © November 2015 Joe Gustin
This Poem was Critiqued By: Wanda S. Thibodeaux On Date: 2015-11-25 22:53:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91667
Hi Joe, Evil may be a bit lazy...there is so much of it in the world we live in, it's just a nightmare. Your last line confuses me slightly. I didn't take the poem to be about war or soldiers. You have used one of my mother's favorite thrashing lines: "Stupid is as stupid does." Lol...Always went with a speech...
I'll let you enlighten me...my friend. Take care. Good post!
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2015-11-24 19:29:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
So true, cowards at heart - trying to feel some self-importance in our world by their evil acts of violence and destruction.
Your message is so clear and validated by recent events -
They are not soldiers and if they are they are guided by cold hearts, cold thoughts, and "evil" minds -
Very good poem,
blessings
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ashni Irey On Date: 2015-11-24 04:54:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
I read this a few days ago and had to think about how much it meant before I could critique. Murderers masquerading as soldiers indeed! I couldn't agree more. That's about all I see in the news. It's become that way, this world we live in. Some people with a different point of view choose to make their voice heard only through some form of aggression, instead of striving for change and setting an example of themselves through perseverance and social conduct. Everyone wants change and they want it immediately. Working hard, waiting.. those things take time.. and who has time, right?
p.s. I get the intensity of emotion conveyed, but "dumb ass" is not very poetic! :)
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