This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-12-09 20:54:16 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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I Can't Believe

I can't believe  how you tempt me  with your sheet lightning eyes  your rum coloured hair  those lips that beckon me so. Yet still I answer your siren’s call To play with your flame to know your fire Knowing full well that it will burn my  old world down to exhausted wicks To the absolute ending  of ashes

Copyright © December 2015 Joe Gustin

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2016-01-03 08:46:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Amazing how simple words put together in just the right fashion bring out the soul of a writer with such beautiful imagery which makes a great poem. Passion fuels this piece and your choice of words, i.e. sheet lighting eyes, rum colored hair, simply flow in the crux of this - the reason thus your second verse - Truly poetic and unique ending - "burn my old world down to exhausted wicks" One of your finest works, blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: kevin Dunn On Date: 2015-12-12 03:04:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Ah yes Joe. Quite a clssic sounding piece, well put together. Beware the sirens call, how many have been drawn down into the depths. Great job really enjoyed the read as always. Cheers Kevin.
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