This Poem was Submitted By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2016-09-08 19:52:00 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Morning Scent Could you taste—
aromatic darkened bean’s brew wafting
crescent curls scent, beneath wakening
nostrils, slowly nudging sleepy eyed
rumination to awareness while dawn’s
crisp, cools breath’s vapor in quiet
dulcet tones honoring, morning’s
devotion being spoken softly,
lavender’s pink tinged hue explodes
in bright amber alert, signaling bird
songs to greet the world’s rising
Are first moments illusions, or—
tender treasures of day’s birth?
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Copyright © September 2016 Lora Silvey
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2016-09-24 09:16:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Beautifully done Lora. The world, the coffee (I have always been an early riser, even as a boy- the day just was too exciting to pass up, but my earliest delightful memory is the aroma of the coffee percolating).
This is a well put together collage; a well done reason. Most (including me) seldom find the fluidness you show here. It is a bit stunning.
The colors are, in some respects; suggestive and analogous, I have not missed it! It might be my favorite invigorating moment in the poem.
Overall, this is a fine piece of poetry! Thank you LORA.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2016-09-17 13:28:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
You really have an interesting way with words. Such a lovely way to wake up in the morning.I like the structure you use in this offering. I see zero problems except wishing I had wrote it. The flow is as easy as the awaking itself. Bravo Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2016-09-16 12:17:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
They are without a doubt "Tender Treasures Of Day's Birth", the gift of a new day with the simplest of pleasures that envelop us to enjoy are at hands reach - These are the worlds best moments to live in and appreciate every single day - The birds are nature just happy and singing every morning while they fly to feed themselves and find shelter - they are happy to do so for it was intended for them - the calling of the birds are to greet not just themselves to a new day but to show us how blessed we are -
Beautifully written - a wonderful poetic write as always with the soft words you instill - to each line -
It's a beautiful day to enjoy -
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ashni Irey On Date: 2016-09-13 12:30:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
On reading this, I am immediately transported to the very moment you describe. I can smell the coffee, the morning air out my window, in my nose, among other things. All the colours you describe are so warm and subtle, and so real. Your choice of words to capture something we all see everyday is commendable. These moments are treasures only if we see them as such. Lovely work.
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