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I was born and raised in Maine, and spent most of my life in that great state. I have worked in many occupations, have several years of college education, though no degree. I began writing poetry in college c.1958. I had no intention of publishing any, but have been urged by friends to do so. My 4th book, Against the Tide, is now back from the publishers and is available from Goose River Press, 3400 Friendship Road, Waldoboro, ME 04572 and The Personal Book Shop, 144 Main St., Thomaston, ME 04861 (or by Email martibooksource@earthlink.com) and in Mr. Paperback, Elm Plaza, Waterville, ME. I participate in poetry readings locally, and enjoy them very much, accepting suggestions and criticism from others. A few of my poems have been published in small local periodicals and on the web. I have won a few insignificant contests and prizes. I live in the woods of Maine (150 acres) and enjoy walking them with my dog and cat, plus the other life I find there. I am not a hunter, fisherman type, however, simply enjoy the natural stuff. I enjoy reading many other poets. My favorites are Anne Sexton, Pablo Neruda, Pessoa, Walt Whitman and Adrienne Rich. I enjoy classical, country, R & B, old-time rock & roll, some pop music. My poems come almost entirely from my experiences, observations and journey through life. I hope you enjoy the poems as much as I have enjoyed the journey, though not always pleasant. I am active politically, also, having run for local town council and the State Legislature in Maine. My 1st three books are not available at this time. For a pic of me, you can find one at poetryinacup.com on their Poets' Pages. (It was emailed, don't have url to make it available here.)

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Poem TitlePoet NameCritique Given by Wayne R. LeachCritique Date
Passion's PlayRobert L TremblayTime spent to construct this complex piece must have been outlandish. I appreciate the effort and give you an "E" for it. A fine message, and the form nearly supplants the words. the combination of both provide an absolutely "divine" message. The occasional and disconnected rhymes throughout the piece rejuvenates the reader's attention at very pertinent points of the work. I wonder why the space near the bottom of this shaped poem, however. Am I missing the point? I think you have created an outstanding statement about the sacrifice He made. Befitting at this time of release for the Mel Gibson film. Well done, thanks for sharing with us.2004-03-01 22:45:38
Ego TripSergio M chavezBye! I think this poem is not worthy of my time to critique, but I would like to register a comment rather than skipping. Sorry, but best wishes for locating some place that makes you happier than you seem to be at this juncture. I do wish you well.2004-03-01 22:33:01
Growing a RoseRebecca LeeA true display of the affection for your beloved spouse, and a truly different style for a love poem which are usually flowing and often rhyming and filled with eloquent imagery. This one is exceptional in its honest matter-of-fact, yet descriptive stratements. It seems almost more about the author than about the love, and this is not a bad thing. It is, in its brevity, a miraculous disclosure of a firm and secure love. I enjoyed this straying from the norm very much. Of course, we can compare love to roses. It just comes naturally, but the way in which you have accomplished this is truly exceptional. The repetition of "always" "beautiful" standing by themselves at the end is really an impressive and strong affirmation of the love. Thanks for submitting. Keep up the good work, for I'll be back to read more of yours. :) wl2004-02-29 11:43:34
I Have MemoriesSandra J KelleyOK, you asked for it. Here's my attempt at "brutality" - which usually is not my thing. I'll call it honesty. I have memories of being alive - [1st 3 lines I like.] of sunlight touching my skin at the point when it is burning memories of cool water lapping - [how about a rhyme here? - churning? yearning?] at my ankles as we stroll on the beach arguing about latex memories of my heart beating deep breathing and sweat other than that I remember nothing not the sound of your name or the stretch of my throat - [loved this line] as I spoke it I do not - [I think I'd alter these next 4 lines' endings, lengths] remember the brush of your hand in my hair the warm flannel covering [similar to this???] [as I spoke it I do not remember the brush of your hand in my hair the warm flannel covering] your chest the gentle suck of your teeth as your breath - [great] filled my ear the rythm - [sp. -rhythm] we created movement - [I think this line is not separated sufficiently, a comma "we created, movement"] bodies entangled I do not - [the line break here works nicely] remember Sincere best wishes for your poetry, anthologies and fundraising. You sound like a very compassionate individual. My compliments on your fine initial posting of this one. It really is almost there, I believe. :) 2004-02-28 22:47:27
japanese verse 21 to 40 - Second CollectionErzahl Leo M. Espino21. beautiful. alliteration powers this excellent poem. 22. wonderful. personification AND alliteration. Smooooth! 23. nice, but the last line seemed a little strained, weak in "far..." 24. ah, Confucian! I, too, love philosophical excellence. 25.“Dawn” First sign of sunlight Pouring in silent delight Warm as morning smile - [plural smiles?] 26. Masterful. the "k" in "treks" seems a little bit harsh, shocking for the "gentle traveler". maybe trods or plods, something a little softer in tone? 27. Universal drive - [lovvve the v's in these 2 lines] To live free and to survive - [is 2nd "to" necessary? syllable count isn't ALL important. "freely &" ?] Knows no boundaries - [oh-oh! catchy and nice] 28. without the title, I wouldn't see the rose, only the color. Maybe that's good. I like the smoothness, though. 29. Assonance is pleasing here. Personification, too. Like this one much. 30. It's fun-time! A little too playful with the v's, but well planned and thought out. the assonance works well, though. 31. Are the tenses correct here? Maybe "shied away"? 32. A little more [and better] playfulness. Well done. 33. A little vague, but I like the beginning. Could this use a little more definition? 34. Now this, I ...... 'd better leave alone. 35. OK, but nothing special here, either. Kind of matter-of-fact. 36. KKKKripes! Not for me. Sorry. 37. Better, but still a little vague and seeming to struggle. Am I being too harsh, or am I getting weary? Oh, well..., 3 more to go. 38. Nope, I am NOT weary. If I was, this one wakened me. I love it. Super job here. Only one thing. There are hidden, or half-syllables in L1 [oc-e-an & stall-i-on], that seem to extend the count a little. Not a big deal though for it could be o-shun & stall-yun, I guess. Depends on where you're from - kinda. 39. Pretty nice, sentimentality shining through. 40. Yeah, the l's are the dramatists in this one. Pretty nice. Overall, I really enjoyed the visit, and this art form which you seem to relish and perform. Thanks for sharing your expertise in this difficult genre. Share more. :-) wl 2004-02-28 18:45:47
Just Like YouMick FraserVery emotional tale, from top to bottom. I rather think this a little lacking in poetic quality, form, rhythm. It seems quite prosy, catalectic. I feel deeply for the pouring out, and the courage required to post this. Please do not be offended by my honesty, and please correct me if you consider me incorrect. I have enjoyed many of your other works, and feel the potential is in this piece with some work applied. It almost seems "spur-of-the-momentish", a pouring out spontaneously, which is well and good to get the material in B&W. Then it needs to be caressed, fondled and loved (if you will). Please let me see/hear any re-writes. Thanks for submitting this.2004-02-28 17:55:45
I am a lighthousemarilyn terwillegerOne of the finest poems in many a moon! I write about the sea often, having been born and raised near the rocky coast of Maine. You have captured perfectly one of the bastions of the coast. I know of no improvements that could be made. AND - you've used so many tools of the poet brilliantly. This is "top shelf" stuff!! I've had no better read in weeks, at least. Hope it wins!2004-02-27 21:25:39
Neuter AllegianceMell W. MorrisEnjambment works very well here. The consonance, assonance and alliteration throughout most of this work seems extraordinary. Interior rhyming is effective in many instances, and the poem flows quite well. I might try to tweak the meter just a bit, but it "ain't" that big of a deal. Nearly a masterpiece, Mell. Thanks for submitting this one. Politics is one of my passions because I believe that the power has become an obsessionin our government(s). :-( Write on. wl2004-02-27 21:14:17
Winter Treesmarilyn terwillegerI think similes are not for haiku, and the duality of the verbs dancing/embrace doesn't work for me. I'd try to change one of the "ing" endings to a more concrete verb. The image is great, and with a small amount of work, this can be a great haiku in my opinion. I love this form of poetry. I will not attempt to re-write this, but would be interested in seeing and commenting on any change. Thanks for submitting. :)2004-02-27 21:01:37
One Just BellRick BarnesVery neat poem, nice rhythm, rhymes [slant and true], alliteration. Excellent ending. a couple possible alterations: That washes clean all saved souls confessed. - [Is saved needed? Washes clean & confessed suffices??] Let me hear a dull dank knell - [Excellent "double whammy" here, 2 d's, 2 ll's. I hear it.] To work toward and forge that one just bell - [I hesitated here to see if a word could be deleted. Not.] That rings for everyone. - [It' fine, perfect as is.] Great read. Thanks for sharing this nice work. 2004-02-27 20:42:41
Closer to Far AwayJoanne M UppendahlThis is great, but I can't say much. I've critiqued the revision. I see little difference, except the word "be" that was left out of the 1st. Did I miss something else? I'll let my other critique speak for this one, too, regarding the possible deletion of "from earth". Best wishes.2004-02-27 20:32:49
These delicious aromas like foreign countrieshj elliotVery strong piece with the numerous similes, the consonance, the alliteration, and the use of smell, sight and sound. Yes, even the sense of touch. Wonderfully composed and brought to that excellent surprise climax. I never would have expected the "war", only a possible lost love or the making of love. and I give in to - [wonder if the "to" would be better moved to begin the next line.] these delicious aromas like foreign countries -Excellent work. The 2nd stanza is perfection. In stanza 3, should it be a "wide mattress"? Maybe not, maybe an intended personification?? If so, GREAT. Write on, poet! 2004-02-27 20:11:00
Dirt Devilmarilyn terwillegerAh, the zzzz's don't even pretend to be sleeping here. I can see that "little devil" doing his thing. Wonderful piece, a very enjoyable piece with vivid imagery. Wonderful alliteration throughout. A lot of action, even in the silent beginning, building throughout, and then "fizzling" brilliantly in the last stanza. The only thing I might suggest is an inspection of the line lengths, esp. in the 1st stanza, or is the enjambment more powerful. I don't know. Only a very minor thought. Delete if you like! Great job! :)2004-02-27 19:52:14
Every Poem An AutographMell W. MorrisAn excellent job! The alliteration is great, and the last lines of the center 3 stanzas, and L2 of the 3rd, are jewels with their internal rhymes. The enjambment is fascinating. You really know how to use the tools of the poet. A clever switch in stanza 5, to jump the rhyme from L1's "apprising" to L2's surprising. Loved every bit of this. Unless "unsayable" needs a hyphen, I see no need for change. Best wishes for success.2004-02-27 19:27:59
What Gives?Michael J. CluffA catchy little poem, Michael. I'm not sure why the 3 etc.'s, nor the inspiration from whence this came. I found it read easily until I came to the "lie", then hesitated, went back, re-read. I believe the "lie" is meant to be singled out for a specific reason, meaning the telling of an untruth and joyously getting away with it. The other possibility I saw was that "I" was living a life that was a total lie, a deceptive one. Isn't it supposed to be a "white striped tie" in L7? I think the consonance and alliteration is very strong throughout this work. The brevity of L2 in each stanza is great and the colors work well, too. I enjoyed the poem. Write on. :)2004-02-27 19:14:44
Insects and Other Tiny NationsJoanne M UppendahlExcellent with all the interior, slant and ending rhymes, the consonance, alliteration, etc. I would try to "doctor up" some of the imagery. Though quite good, I think it could be stronger in some spots. Maybe some of the color in the second stanza could be shared with later ones, or deleted. Most of us know monarchs [are yellow and black]. And when they all arose to where she waited, - ["And" seems unnecessary; leave the "a" off arose? they told her tales of all that lived in air, - [...tales of what lived...?] in dirt, in hives - of hopes and tiny homes sometimes poisoned - of bodies pulled apart. Though they understood that they were often food - [delete "that"?] for frogs, birds and other tiny nations, they didn’t know - [maybe a substitution for "nations"?] why they were being stomped, swatted and pulled apart. As the child watched, a globe appeared; like a magnet A wonderful rendition. I hope to see the final version. Best wishes.2004-02-26 21:19:18
Living a LossRobin Ann CrandellRobin, I sense the deepest of pain here, and can identify with it. I have been in love with someone for over 50 years, and never have even kissed her intimately, nor made love. We are very good friends, but I always felt it should have been more than that. Enough about me, for now. You said you wanted an honest critique. The poem is quite emotional, for sure, but I found it too repetitive. I know why, but it still bores the reader. There are some rhymes that seem quite forced, or at best, obvious. I am relieved that you expended this energy and got it out. Hopefully it helped ease the pain of a lost love, and I want you to know that the experts have agreed that this is the MOST difficult topic of which to compose poetry. Do not despair, write on.2004-02-26 20:53:01
japanese verse 40 (Petals)Erzahl Leo M. EspinoExcellent. No suggestion could improve on it, so I'll make none. I love these Japanese forms of poetry - haiku, senryu, tanka, etc. Will read as many of yours as time allows.2004-02-26 20:19:17
A Growing Appetite for SpringJoanne M UppendahlAh, the visions come alive! Beautiful visions they are, too. Well done, Joanne. Much consonance and alliteration used very well, close rhyming but not abused. I wonder a little about the form and line count alterations in some stanzas. Other than that, I can only say that I enjoyed the many truths of nature in this nice poem. Not at all pastoral or otherwise boring. It moves well and was a very easy read. Looking forward to more.2004-02-26 20:14:20
A Passion For SenryuThomas Edward WrightI need no apologies, that's for sure. This is a masterful form, even if raping the senryru word a little. The story within a story [kind of] yet all inclusive. What a way to describe this chain of events, this abuse, this mortal failing. I enjoyed it through the morbidity. It held me, urged me onward. I wonder why the colon is needed in L11? Wouldn't a period surfice? Now, I'm really getting a little too picky, aren't I? Had to find something to say other than WOW. Keep 'em coming, TEW.2004-02-26 15:28:34
Senyru 132Michael J. CluffWow, this really touches the core of the humanity issue in senyru. Why did he create the vale? To hide his corpse after doing himself in, or did somebody force him to at the point of a gun? The suspense and vividness of the scene created could be no better. The color in L1 encourages the reader to move along and hints at the dark content of this excellent piece. The "s"'s in L2 hiss like a rattler, and this is carried into the center of L3. I can almost see the sidewinder there, inspecting the body. I wouldn't change a letter!2004-02-26 15:16:59
haikuhaikuRegis L ChapmanCute, though a little stretch to be called haiku, I think. It is not seasonal, related to nature only obliquely through the human factor, and doesn't really indicate a moment captured. Like I said, cute and that was evidently its intent with the fun-poking footnote. No pun intended. Don't despair, I'll read more of your poetry, Reeg. Best of everything. wl 2004-02-26 12:40:14
Since god left Chicagohj elliotA very rewarding read, the rhythm's superb and the slant rhymes "gone" "alone" really brings out the power of the last line in the beginning stanza. Also, the interior rhyme "begin again". The simile in the beginning also commands the reader's attention. You have used much of what is available to one involved in the art of poetry. A very spiritualistic and evocative work. Thanks for sharing.2004-02-26 12:04:34
For MomMick FraserAh, yes. Mother Earth. Excellent can be used freely to describe this beautiful collection of triads. The slant rhyme "aroma" "mother" really peaked my attention and drove me forward. Then, the excellent consonance further on in the poem really pleased this reader. Wonderful job. I find nothing of which to complain, naturally [pun intended]. Please continue to post more, Mick.2004-02-25 21:58:29
FallingJordan Brendez BandojoI'm falling for the artistry of your "pen" in this work. The assonance in "bereaved feels" and "pollen...fall" is great. It soothes the reader with the association with nature is caught near the end, preparing him/her for the surprise ending of your expression of love. I would question ending so many lines with a preposition. Is it intentional to extend the automatic hesitation at line endings? If so, then I apologize and will read this as intended. I have a tendency to attempt connecting the preposition to its phrase immediately. The only other minor detail I see is the "roof". Should this be plural or be prefaced by the article "a"? Oh, well. Other than this, I see nothing needed here. Great piece of work, Jordan. I'll continue to read your poetry - and learn.2004-02-25 21:48:15
Closer to Far Away (edit)Joanne M UppendahlAn improvement for sure, although I really enjoyed the 1st, as well. One little question is all. Do we need the statement "from earth"? It seems pretty well understood that's where we are peering from. Other than that, IT'S A BEAUTY, Joanne. I think the capital "Someone" is great. It's always a pleasure to read your artistry.2004-02-25 21:31:30
The OakRobert L TremblayAn interesting shaped poem with rhyme, too! I think the rhymes seem a little forced at times, e.g. Through the parched surfaces etched Where 100 years good, five thirsting From unrelenting sun making oak wretched - [esp. here, but it ain't that bad] Until seasons changed and rain was fetched. Was it one day. - [I'm not sure this is needed. Why not "It was one day"? Another very minor detail] The pausing in the roots works very well. I enjoyed this. Share more!2004-02-25 21:14:26
Down The MountainRegis L ChapmanA beautiful ride down - into the emotion of love from the love of nature's beauty! Well done, poet. An intricate weaving of rhymes, and consonance to follow the twisting highway to its destination. Write on.2004-02-25 20:42:58
saturdayErin E RolandBeautifully emotional! Realistically descriptive! A lot of thoughts passing through this mind as it contemplates the future?? Wonderfully picturesque imagery. A nice work, but the 4th line seemed a little puzzling. Irrepressible with 2 s's. Thanks for sharing this with us. 2004-02-25 20:29:52
The Band Leader’s Grandson Is ComatoseThomas Edward WrightDeserving of a one-word critique: SUPERB! I love this work. It uses almost all the tools at the hands of a poet - too many to name. The double contraction made me hesitate, maybe that was the intent, to allow me to catch my breath before the train came. I liked the Monopol(y)-istic introduction to this train, and the return to the Monopoly "Chance card", almost metonymy with life itself. I could go on, but with nothing to add to this beautiful piece, why bother. Write on.2004-02-25 18:56:05
Senryu 135Michael J. CluffWOW! Talk about human nature, this well done senryu explodes with imagery. Great job. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Write on.2004-02-25 18:29:07
Hidden KeyDeniMari Z.Sadness abounds and is felt by the reader here. I would try analyzing the poem a little for line length and endings. The rhymes are fine, though varied. A couple of places to consider: The key to her life is hidden somewhere beneath scores of scarred - [could emotions end this line instead of beginning the next?] emotions, a young lady felt despair. She dances to the music playing in her soul, sings from memories of - [how about times ending this one?] times that were out - [and combining these last 2 lines, maybe deleting "that were"?] of her control. - [I think the meter might be improved in this manner.] Wonderful use of consonance and slant rhymes. I enjoyed the read. Come back with more.2004-02-24 20:07:11
HeartCirclesRebecca LeeA tender and emotional, yet strong piece of art. Brief lines work well when there are this many emotions to describe and share with the reader. I love the comparisons/ties to nature in the beginning and the softness of the ending lines especially. Write on, Rebecca!2004-02-24 19:53:01
A Late Afternoon ServiceThomas Edward WrightBeee-aaa-uuu-tifully done. Excellent rhythm/meter throughout, and just enough rhyming within and without to help capture the wonderful imagery. There is a journey as beautiful awaiting all of us, I believe. I can make no improvement here. Best loved lines = I listen intently tonight. Manage to Pocket my tongue. Awaiting more, Thomas. wl2004-02-24 19:41:02
untitledMick FraserTitle - "Sense-Less..." ? Bravo for this descriptive analysis of the human species and the world around it. It takes a lot of adjectives, nouns and other parts of speech to provide that, and you succeed in this piece. Well done.2004-02-24 19:29:57
Toilet Soliloquies (Fart One)Mick FraserI catch the drift of this, and can excuse the title, but I think a little refining would make a big improvement - both in language and form. It appears to be a little like a spontaneous, unedited piece. I can accept the humor of it, but it kind of turned me off (pun intended) a little. I look forward to some more of your work as I can see the potential here for greater poetry. Thanks for the change of piss - I mean pace.2004-02-24 19:21:47
10:26 RevisitedSandra J KelleyA very nice piece of work. The, more or less, uncommon use of half rhymes is good. The alliteration is also used very well. Catching the "black" again in a different line location is an attention getter. I wonder if "warm hand" would be better than "hand warm...", I love the repetitive use of the "warmth", too. The poem really emphasizes the ability of memories to haunt us. Well done, write on!2004-02-24 12:03:10
RainRegis L ChapmanOutstanding!! I love the imagery and the use of so many internal rhymes, close rhymes, end rhymes without any reduncancy. From the perfection contained in this artwork, I can detect that you spent the needed time to see it was there. so now I do say with a sigh - [is the "do" necessary?] That's all the fault I could possibly find. Great job!2004-02-24 11:49:09
About Love and Deathstephen g skipperA strong poem, but I see several misspellings, and many of the line endings and other places would suffice with no comma. 1 m in tomorrow amidst, and lost it all or, [are the 2 "or"s intentional?] Or not to have loved, separation remembrance Its is in your honour, -[It is in or It's in?] I would check the capitalization, as well. Hope all of this does not discourage you. The poem, with these minor corrections, will be a fine work.2004-02-24 11:40:48
a glimpse, a viewErin E RolandBeautiful imagery in many lines. I would only mention that readers are slowed, paused by commas and line breaks. In retrospect, I wonder if some of your "pauses" might be relocated, for example: Dark, tree-lined road tunnel to freedom promise of a kiss good night, full of stars! and: only moments that can never be used up and we will see, Only suggestions, the rest seemed excellent - and I really enjoyed this piece of art work. Write along.2004-02-24 11:07:49
TruthRachel F. SpinozaBeautifully done, Rachel! This sonnet-like piece of art goes to the top shelf. I can find absolutely nothing to complain about, and for me, that is VERY unusual. It earns a 10.2004-02-22 17:48:31
The MatrixRobert L TremblayI think this word game/puzzle belongs in a puzzle book. It hardly rewards the reader as much as it must have the "poet" when he accomplished this miraculous play on words, which must be almost mathematically impossible. Without the footnotes, I'd have no clue. Sorry!2004-02-22 17:37:47
The Elms of St PeterThomas Edward WrightVer-r-ry interesting with its [almost]conceit and nearly metaphysical content. Some might suggest this to also be an example of personification. If so, it would be a very good one. I enjoyed this demise and reincarnation [almost] of the elm tree. Keep up the excellent work.2004-02-22 17:25:34
ArchaeRegis L ChapmanThere is much strength in brevity. This may be a little too brief, leaving the reader searching for the real meaning, especially in the last 2 lines. I like it, even without the footnotes.2004-02-22 12:08:11
Silent SCREAM!Robert L TremblayA very strong statement, and well made! I do think ther appears to be a little too much strain in the rhyming attempts. There are seemingly a lot of commas that detract some from the force of the poet's statement. Maybe a few could be left out?? Maybe, given Fate, a thief or even drug addict, But, impossible now due to abortionist's edict. - [just a thought or 2] Great work overall. Write on.2004-02-22 11:57:55
east oreErin E RolandIn this piece, I'd suggest altering the line lengths just a bit to create a better flowing rhythm. It just appears to have too much of a staccato effect with the single word lines. This can be very effective and give strong emphasis when not overdone. Only one other little question. "Kimberly" seems vague out there all alone, undefined to the reader. Otherwise, I like this piece of art very much. Best wishes. Keep writing.2004-02-22 11:38:28
untitledErin E RolandVery closely knit and emotional piece of work. I think I'd alter some of the line lengths, but not the wording. Ending the 1st line with a preposition seems to weaken the "language". I would consider placing the end of that line after "language", e.g. "My mind plays in a language/all humanity/resonates/" leaving off the comma to more easily connect the next clause. Also, some of the capitalization seems unecessary, i.e. "Resonates" & the 2 "And"s. This is a strong work of art, however. Write on!2004-02-22 11:27:40
Tree of LifeRobert L TremblayI found this quite a challenge, and feel that the reader is OVERLY challenged by this type of game. I can appreciate the work and thought which went into this poem, but when a poem needs footnotes to lead the reader along, I cannot rank it well. I enjoy challenges, but not in this form of artistry. Sorry!2004-02-21 16:05:15
Then I'll Dance With DragonfliesJoanne M UppendahlBeautifully done, Joanne! Internal rhyming, as well as end of the line, with a very effective use of line length variations. It has a nice rhythm to it. Keep up the good work!2004-02-21 15:53:45
japanese verse 39 (Amnesia)Erzahl Leo M. EspinoNice haiku. The syllable count is correct (for English), but I find this a little philosophical for haiku which is supposed to capture an instant observation, preferably regarding nature and the seasons. I enjoy philosophy, also. Some of my haiku fit in the same category. Thanks for submitting this keen personal poem!2004-02-21 15:47:58
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