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Vandenbergs Love Draining the cup on our last hour of the day Midnight moonlight filters in across the intimate exchange between us - My blessing, is having Your ring of love around me 'till dawn. Contented bond- although not wed no pretense in knowing who shares this bed, This worth more than a million in gold spent on weddings that evaporate. My lover is my angel, my mortal equal and my friend, he picks up what I let fall - when the heaviest troubles are at my end. As the cup drains, with our last kiss of the night, As blue stays blue forever As mystyc remains unknown let this love define us for in your heart I'm home. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-03-25 17:05:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.33333
Hi Poet,
I find this to be a lovely tribute to love and also to the love two people have
for each other...wonderfully written with sporadic rhyming that works so well in this
piece. I write a lot of poetry but have never been able to write a love poem as
exquisit as this one...."my blessing is having your ring of love around me till dawn"..I
know that feeling of love and safety as nothing compares to that when day is done....
...'my lover is my angel my mortal equal'...to find a soul mate at a young age is a
priceless gift...mine passed away some years ago and the thought of marriage to another
has never crossed my mind....'he picks up what I let fall..when the heaviest troubles are
at my end'...what a wonderful safety net this can be...just the knowing that he is there
to pick up the pieces is so comforting....'as mystyc (mystic?) remains unknown let this
love define us as in your heart I am home'...great ending for this poem about love and
comitment....wonderful! Thanks for sharing this one.
Blessings...Marilyn