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A Fragment All day long, chained to his chair, he types pages of his novel, a story he is telling to no-one. The ice cutter (my great grandfather) walked delicately across the blue St. Lawerence. Long pole stretched across open palms... delete Sitting around the dinning room table I ask for a memory of my father like asking for the salt to be passed "There isn't one." I'm told. He is afraid it will be good. At the end of the day he presses delete. A group of orphans are ice skating A seven year old in a blue dress (my mother) Falls, her arm is broken in two pieces...delete The same stories, calculated to reveal nothing, are told over and over, even the words are the same. Freed from his motion control system he begins by erasing himself, In the watertown jail a sheriff pronounces "too many drunken Irishmen anyway" and locks the cell containing a man who may be (my grandfather)...delete I wrestle with silence, contend with my family for the stories they refuse to tell the top half of his lip, a chunk of his wrist, the tip of his right ear. The stories, faster than I can write them are being erased. After the words have filled the air, how will we breathe. |
Additional Notes:
a much earlier version was posted on the link I am still working with it. Sandra
This Poem was Critiqued By: Erzahl Leo M. Espino On Date: 2004-06-04 01:09:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Sandra,
Yes, I very much remember this…and this is supposed to be something of a series. From the title itself “A Fragment” – the mystery and puzzle of the piece is already obvious. As always, you write with such powerful and interesting messages which somehow reflects your diverse personality as an author. I can feel the strong personal connection of this poem. Something a “taboo” but needed to be revealed.
“Sitting around the dinning room table
I ask for a memory of my father
like asking for the salt to be passed
"There isn't one." I'm told.”
--- These are powerful lines and the imageries and words are very effective! It keeps the riddle continuous. Clever metaphor!
“He is afraid it will be good.
At the end of the day he presses delete.”
--- This is a perfect follow-up.
“I wrestle with silence,
contend with my family for the stories
they refuse to tell”
--- There are a lot of surprises in your story, in your poetry…that makes this piece unique and inviting. The truths are delicate…the words are careful.
“The stories, faster than I can write them
are being erased. After the words have filled the air,
how will we breathe.”
--- Great ending…lyrically done! Your words are constantly moving…
Thank you Sandra for the journey...
As always,
Erzahl :)