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Winona, from the High Cliff Father, Did you mention these dark brooding eyes? You had led him down to the beach Told him of my insatiable appetite, Regaled him with tales of my prowess, Trickled cream from this crystal down to Wash his feet with my black hair - There is so much to say, and so little time. You can leave out the part about my eyes. But without them, he will never know, He will never understand why I leapt And left our tribe standing above The broad waist west of the Mississippi, A father’s choice staring into his future - They could never see what it is I saw Through the morning mist, the day I Made a choice, the day I said, “No!” The dark morning I quietly said, “I do,” And stepped off the cloud, To join our great river in its drift Through this land of sky blue waters, Away from your land, into my ocean. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2004-08-06 22:30:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Something in this reminds me of Gloster in King Lear. The images of eyes, beach, cliff-fall ... the hard choice being made. But the hair-washing of feet has another significance. This sacrifice is not only of this world, is it? It is a spiritual separation, from one culture to another.
My daughter's middle name is Wenonah and her mother-in-law, ironically, is Winona. It's not a name heard often in any of its variants. It means first-born daughter, one who would be expected to feel loyalty to her people and their older ways. The eyes of the unnamed "he" and the eyes of the young woman are so different.
This is splendid writing, as always. I'm not in a mental frame to critique well, but I did want you to know that the poem touches me.
Brenda