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This Poem was Submitted By: Karen Ann Jacobs On Date: 2004-09-17 11:23:57 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Jester's Prayers

Dear Painter, Do you behold the longing in my eyes or Glimpse the fealty beneath my mischief? Is my countenance the riddle that works your mind? Twinkle twaddle, twaddle a twinkle. Dear Brush, With all that might flourish Upon your canvas, a vase of hellebore A twist of mug-wort or even a simple rose, Why such scurrility for this blatherskite? Dear Lord, Wilt thou not let yon painter know That mine ineffable love doth wail To be’eth revealed. Please lord, Let yon brush guide M’lady Painter. Amen.

Additional Notes:
This poem was inspired by the painting, "The Jester" by Judith Leyster. You can copy and paste the below link into your browser to veiw it on the net. http://www.allposters.com/gallery.asp?aid=85097&item=125461 Thank you for any comments or suggestions.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2004-09-22 15:30:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
H Karen delightful piece as I told you earlier! Do you behold the longing in my eyes or Glimpse the fealty [ neat word - isn't used much] beneath my mischief? Is my countenance the riddle that works your mind? Twinkle twaddle, twaddle a twinkle. cute nonsense syllables as medieval verse Dear Brush, With all that might flourish Upon your canvas, a vase of hellebore [great] A twist of mug-wort or even a simple rose, Why such scurrility for this blatherskite? why indeed! Clever wording! Dear Lord, Wilt thou not let yon painter know That mine ineffable love doth wail To be’eth revealed. Please lord, Let yon brush guide M’lady Painter. clever and more clever see you soon R

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-09-21 18:02:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.33333
Dear Painter, Dear Brush, Dear Lord......all three individual stanza's have a great read to it.....good structure and word flow, love the setting it presents as well as the love story that is created with the flare of the pen......there should be a capital L on lord.......personal thoughts.......thanks for posting and sharing with us, God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2004-09-21 11:39:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93333
Karen–Excellent trilogy with all strophes interrelated. Great satirical, sardonic, humorist and metaphoric verbiage which create vivid imagery. These prayers, IMO, laments all the eclectic going-ons in the world today: the good, bad, ugly and indifference with hope for some divine intervention to change the picture. Sorry if I’ve misstated your purpose, but I did enjoy the read. Thanks for sharing this unique post. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: joshua p shelton On Date: 2004-09-20 15:08:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
hmmm..... the poem holds weight only if the reader has indeed seen the poem. also... the usage of archaic english (Wilt thou not let yon painter know) has a tendency to sound flamboyant, arrogant, etc. as a student of classical literature, i realize that is not your intention however, for those that are not, it can be distracting and may lead them to resent rather than appreciate. if you enjoy the ancient languages that much, i would suggest only using them sparingly, rather than makin them the basis of a work. keep writing! -jps-

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2004-09-17 19:58:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Kay-Ren: As with all of your written work -- poems, critiques, replies -- this one spills over with your tender, droll spirit. Full of the goodness of life, the richness of experience and the talent for expression that makes you one of a kind. I love the amplified diction and the wit you've shown once more in this piece -- the longing and humor ring all of my bells. May success shine upon your painterly/poetic endeavors, and prayers be answered in abundance. Now I can't wait to go to the website you've given for a view of "The Jester." Thank you for continuing to be Kay-Ren and letting us enjoy her diamond-like facets. More, please! Appreciatively, Joanne

This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-09-17 19:04:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.16667
Dear Painter, Behold longing reflected in my vision lying within see, more than mischief lurking My countenance riddles working on your mind struming strings, plucking vibrations Oh well I just fealt like rewriting a little, I'm not sure it helps but I had fun, Thanks for letting me read and comment.

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