This Poem was Submitted By: Michael Bird On Date: 2012-05-08 06:59:46 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The trouble of love

Not so long ago I was lost and lonely Then I met you And I want you to know   I think I`m in trouble Maybe I should run On the double  Straightaway into your arms   Let my heart keep you warm My love will keep you calm In my arms you will be safe I never felt this way before Like the calm before the storm Its been so long I`d forgotten what love was for     I`m in trouble Oh,yeah,trouble   Maybe I should run away On the double And Find a way to say Show you what I feel Its trouble     I was lost and lonely  Then I met you Now see what love can do Its trouble   Yes,I`m in trouble And I`m a running  On the double Straight into your arms Ah,ah ah Trouble

Copyright © May 2012 Michael Bird

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2012-05-08 19:29:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Michael this is cute- love = trouble - and it seems to me that someone has your heart and may have it for a very long time. Love is a wonderful feeling - the newness and the time in getting to know someone else - It's clear, concise and gets the message across easily without embellishing it with a lot of imagery. Nice - I like it, blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-05-08 15:33:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Michael Theres alot of poetic freedom here in this one! I think its another one that belongs to music-this one belongs to stringed instruments I think! I personally don't think that love should be that it should come before the a womans point of view maybe. The whole thing is beautiful and would be welcomed by your girl. I'm certain of that! At any rate, I like your style. I can always appreciate a write that has its own right. ~smiles~ Ellen
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