This Poem was Submitted By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2000-11-07 07:15:33 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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     God has blessed my life.      How do I know?      He has given me five sound senses... to see the magnificence of your charming smile,   that affectionately put a rainbow scarlet    between your rosy cheeks,   beckoning my sight--    all day long. to listen the tenderness of your dulcet voice,   that benignly blew a zephyr,   suffusing refreshment in every corner of my room;   a shiver of inscrutable sinew ran through my body,   a brand-new, luscious life is born in me--   all night long. to taste the delicacy of your saccharine kindness,   that promisingly unlocked the gate of love   for me to take refuge--   all year long. to smell the aroma of your ambrosial friendship,   that marvelously built a mighty bridge   for me to cross over the lake of desolation;   from forlorn desert you have drawn me back   to a field billowing Elysian memories--   all life long. and to hold you to the zenith of my dreams,   where lavish love on sapphire is engraved--    forever long.

Copyright © November 2000 Jordan Brendez Bandojo

This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-29 12:37:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I am noticing a trend here. Elysium is in 2 of the poems I have reviewed here so far, and I can see the voice of this poet coming out, as I tackle the poems one by one. I like the procession of this poem, and it's a little bit of tension to know if it ends in sorrow or not. It's nice to see one that doesn't end that way. I also like the idea that senses are beyond the physical. Great job, and the style of your voice is becoming clearer here. Thanks, REEG!

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