Rebecca B. Whited's E-Mail Address: beckwhited@yahoo.com
So far 709 People have Entered a Personal Profile on The Poetic Link! Click Here to see the rest of them or to Add your Own Personal Profile Now!
Below you will see ALL of the Critiques that Rebecca B. Whited has given on The Poetic Link.
By Clicking a Poem Title, you can view the poem that is associated with each Critique.
If you would like to view all of Rebecca B. Whited's Poetry just Click Here.
Click HERE to return to ThePoeticLink.com Database Page!
Displaying Critiques 51 to 52 out of 52 Total Critiques.| Poem Title | Poet Name | Critique Given by Rebecca B. Whited | Critique Date |
| Charge of Discrimination | Debbie Spicer | Debbie, It is a pleasure to be able to critique one of your submission again. I have been away from TPL for just a little while, but I am back again. I haven't had time for posting and critiquing, but this was a delightful surprize to find this one on my list. This poem is profound in its theme and message. You are so right; shy would anyone want to discriminate against anyone? I am truly sorry that you experienced it first-hand. "Rustlings of the tongue in restless thought." [I like the use of the word 'rustlings' here...packs a double whammy...the murmurs of those participating in idle gossip and the connotation that they [the contemptious accusors] are 'rustling/rounding up' anything they can to be used against you.] "Critical contempt pierces its transient wrongs, shielding not the sacrifice or shame of disgrace." [WOW, how eloquently you have portrayed the hurt one must feel when discriminated against, as well as the scarifice, shame and disgrace of the whole issue. You have used great poetic devices here, I like the aliteration, assonance, personification [of contempt, as if it is a warroir weilding a sword] allowing you with no shield a means of defense. "Where is all restitution?" [I like the use of the rhetorical question here, as it needs no answer. Sorry to say, this does go on in our society...it has for ages past, and sorrowfully, will probably continue] "Fluid emotion by sauntered frenzy [the imagery here is good...I like 'sauntered frenzy'] ooze from the mouth of the talk." [I would suggest that you change these lines to read: "Fluid emotion by sauntered frenzy 'oozes' from the mouth of the talk"...OR, "Fluid 'emotions' by sauntered frenzy ooze from the mouth of the talk...it needs to be 'emotions ooze' or 'emotion oozes'.] "Intentions to harm till the destruction of the one, the innocent, the sacrifice. Faithfulness and self-respect are diminished… one spirit one soul descend..." [These last lines portray the spirit of the one accused in a most moving manner...self-respect, spirit, soul diminished, as the sacrifice descends into the depts of despair, leaving her/him with no faith in a society where discrimination teems abundantly in life's cup.] Thanks so much for the read. It has awakened a sense of compassion in me, and I hope others will be affected similarly. Great post! Beck | 2003-09-07 19:24:53 |
| Lunar Spoofs | Joanne M Uppendahl | Hi Joanne! You are not going to believe this, but I just wrote a poem about the moon and I used 'silver sliver' to describe its shape! Of course, my poem is not as good as yours! LOL I have a way to go before I can top yours! I like the way you take the moon through all its various phases...then let it shine in its full glory in its full phase! 'Renounce your changeling sisters for fooling us with put-on phases.', as if it was only tempting [spoofing] us with its partial fullness. I like this one! Beck | 2003-09-03 23:07:34 |
| Poem Title | Poet Name | Critique Given by Rebecca B. Whited | Critique Date |
Displaying Critiques 51 to 52 out of 52 Total Critiques.
Click one of the following to display the: First 50 ... Previous 50 ... Last 50 Critiques.
If you would like to view all of Rebecca B. Whited's Poetry just Click Here.