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NUCLEAR MADNESS (old acrostic) Nothing is as insane as willed extinction Unless one includes unnecessary death Caused by man's greed and his lack of' compassion, Lacking since beginning, 'fore the birth of Seth; Each man/woman responsible for their fate And everyone conscious of final date, Requiring human presence at heaven's gate. Madness formed by inhumanity toward man As such, man, himself, is to blame for judgment Descending, beginning in Gulf of Oman. Nuclear apocalypse - man, not God, sent, Ending in one long, excruciating day, Silenced, forever, by man's cruel, wicked way. Such will be life...and death, in the month of May. |
Additional Notes:
This acrostic poem was written about twenty years ago, in my "fomative" years.
Bobby T.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2004-02-07 18:05:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90698
Hi Bobby,
It's nice to see again your piece 20 years ago! During your "formative" years?
Interesting! So, you were into acrostic before already?
I just learned this form last year. NUCLEAR and MADNESS seems to be a good pair
in the realization of acrostic form because they contain the same number of letters (8 letters each)
making two uniform stanzas. And of course, the theme is significant because nuclear thing is the
talk of the world. I also noticed that you applied a unique rhyming pattern in both
stanza. You have ABABBBB interesting rhymings scheme that doesn't seem to hinder the
flow of ideas.
I like the ideas here:
"Each man/woman responsible for their fate
And everyone conscious of final date,
Requiring human presence at heaven's gate."
It's not actually an idea nor a theory but a truth! Like the phrase "heaven's gate". Hope each one
of us can enter it.
This piece also reflects your true faith in God.
The inclusion of proper nouns like Seth and Gulf of Oman enhances originality.
The ideas you have here are life's significance. It takes a wise man to come with this. You are!
Thanks for sharing, Bob! Congratulations in advance on your winning piece The Devil's Ballet D'Action with Cardinal Law. I'm glad to have it on top!
Jordan