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Bound By quantum creature bound by body blinded by suffering buffering a wrong divine heaven's oddity clearly sublime creation continuous spine along with time a song aligned continuity splined hands and arms hold fast electric pain found bands and charms wound in haste sound smell touch taste style pass clouds of earth do the same wasting wasteful chaste but tasteful all the while |
Additional Notes:
Considering self and the larger body I imagine. Let me know what you think. Influenced, as is all my work, by The Prophet by Kahlil Gibran. Not the words on the page, but Richard Harris' voice in my mind from an innocent time. A gift to me by my mother at age 10. Maybe I have said this when posting other works, but only during the writing of this did I see the connection.
If I remember this correctly, Gibran said "your house if your larger body." Ergo the earth and sky in which my brethren fly...
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2004-03-17 17:49:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84615
very Gibran like indeed
quantum creature bound by body blinded by suffering buffering a wrong
divine heaven's oddity clearly sublime creation continuous spine along
with time a song aligned continuity [splined? don't know this word] hands and arms
hold fast electric pain found bands and charms wound/ [the ambigity of the word "wound" in this double context makes the construction doubly interesting]
pounding haste sound smell touch taste style pass clouds of earth do the same
wasting wasteful chaste but tasteful all the while.
Really nice stream of conscienceness piece. Regis. I made suggested line breaks to
highlight the internal rhythm and rhyme of the piece but clearly this is just a
suggestion.