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What is Rooted We Revisit in Sleep Tonight we closed the bookstore, a warm privacy of illumination clustered around and around us. Our hunger poured over pages of words, gobbled down with sips of coffee. This pleasant frolicking lightens steps taken to the field, and the heavied ones afterward. All evening long our boats with oars drift through dark waters, rippled currents edged in deep night. By morning our bedclothes are soaked, hulking vessels chugging towards the shore. Our footprints threaded through watery pastures have all gone, leaving no trace, no sound. Alone in the field, our sycamore resolutely stands—a sentinel guarding moments still sacred, altared before us, silences of unspoken words when I knelt before you, made the scream rise gurgling from the back of your throat’s delicious and silky darkness; an offering, a receiving. The wind is hoarse from wailing all night, wheat threshed upon the ground. From here we see each marker, every dog-eared page, words risen prayers before these life altars. One sleep passes into another sleep, days tumbling end over end. Under the torpid darkness of trees the body slowly heals. We have forgotten all words, silence except the rustling of browned stalks, the winter wheat extends its hairy bristled arms to hold us longer in the field. How often we go back to the sycamore, guarding the field’s edge. Our words are all gone—spilt out over our lips spread wide open to take, but what to give? The hope of trees, new leaves. |
Additional Notes:
The sycamore is significant to my wife and I, as it is where I proposed to her, and where we had an early first date long ago.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2004-05-05 13:21:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.81250
Hi Don,
This poem is a fabulous journey over the narrators life and I so thouroughly enjoyed
reading it. I only hope that my own marriage(3y) will grow like this.
"A warm privacy of illumination" is an appealing phrase that gives off warmth and light.
It reminds me of that bible verse, Matthew 5: 14----"You are the light of the world. A
city on a hill can not be hidden. Neither do people light a lamp and put it under a bowl.
Instead they put it on a stand and it gives light to everyone in the house. In the same way let your light shine before men that they may see your good deeds and praise your Father in heaven."
So true how the time spent together helps to lighten the load of the work. The journey and the
world make us feel very small, and the journey seems so quick!
The words flow much like the breeze through the leaves of the sycamore. I only have one
suggestion for this piece and that is to cut these lines in half to make it not quite so
long. I think this will give a neater look to the piece without actually changing anything.
But in honesty, it's quite lovely as is.
Thanks for a warm bright spot in my day.
Blessings,
Jennifer
The ending is exquisite, "The hope of trees, new leaves"