This Poem was Submitted By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-09-24 01:41:54 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Schism wisdom
it said
to the hair on my neck
and in my head
a pass in the night
just before bed
moving and standing still at once
colored on left and right
fleck
both missing... that
and encompassed conscience and cat
in a single frame
draw out over and over
a chocolate taste
that thing without a name
an obsessive compulsive pulse
and yet delicious in repose
haste
that everyone knows
sssssssssssssstand
wwwwwwwwwwalk
sliding hands
grip
that
one
toe
clap
warmed like ice
sitting isosceles talk
waning and warning dice
have stolen my show
schism |
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Copyright © September 2004 Regis L Chapman
Additional Notes:
Came to me quickly, a cat spilling water on my wife in the night.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2004-10-06 07:58:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Reeg,
Just dropping by to be inspired by your writings once again!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Amour Stakwi'a Dresbach On Date: 2004-10-05 11:14:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.50000
I love reading about people's experiences. A good poet will write about almost anything or maybe anything period at times and this is how we come to write of things that perhaps no one else has. It also relieves the poets' boredom with repeatedly writing about the same types of issues, feelings, etc. I used to write about nothing but love and everything had to rhyme or come close to rhyming and if it didn't, I didn't seem to think it flowed. However, some things I wrote ended up with forced lines and too much extensive thinking about how to perfect it.
I see here that you have either developed an expansion in your writings by writing on various things or that you have the natural knack to write about human experience.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2004-10-02 13:41:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Very clever poem. I like the brevity of the lines that lead you right down to the end of the poem. The worlds are filled with meaning that navigate the reader down through delightful reading. The words roll off the tongue very well which makes this piece just so poetic and fun to read.
Thanks for explaining the inspiration behind it, because I was wondering (smile).
This poem reminds me of one of those deep thought moments, and when you think about it, we could find deep thought in just about any moment, and to think that you took the time to make an in depth poetic reflection on a cat spilling water on your wife in the middle of the night . . . well this is real poetry (smile).
Thanks for sharing it on TPL. I love its style and found myself reading it over and over several times just to hear myself say the cute and sophisticated verbiage you have used here.
Very creative. Excellent poem.
Latorial
www.latorial.com
This Poem was Critiqued By: Karen Ann Jacobs On Date: 2004-09-28 18:21:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
As I read this poem, I felt a bit freaked out and scared. The world felt skewed from normal, my eye twitched and it wasn’t until I read the note that I felt relief as, with that short note, you put the world back into normal perspective. Perhaps that note should be part of the poem. It wouldn’t be nice to leave us tweaked in the head like that. Thank you for the drug free trip.
Kay
This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-09-24 11:04:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.19643
Is - sitting isosceles talk - a yoga reference, if so is that you or the cat, I can picture a kitty in meditation-meuuuum meuuuum, being the mantra; Oh well thanks for letting me read and comment.
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