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The Lost Poems of San Francisco

Sitting in a corner booth, Kerouac in hand, Cassady on my mind, A poem looked right into my eyes and I, in a fit of free verse, failed to see. Crossing the street, two blocks down from City Lights, a taste of Ginsberg on my lips, Ferlinghetti phrases filling my head, a poem brushed close and I, in a swirl of imagery, ignored the touch. Gathering in the park, old friends and literature, discussing commas and Corso, the value of rhyme and the freedom of reason, a poem passed by  and I, deep in the stream of consciousness, barely felt the breeze. Later, alone beneath a reading lamp, I searched yesterday's musings, looking for all those lost poems.

Copyright © July 2005 Gene Dixon


This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2005-08-07 19:21:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
What a fresh and compelling read! We spend so much time in analysis that we miss the joy, the pleasure, the fun of it all. We're so set on the "right" style, the perfect borrowing, the most brilliant expression of our own Muse, that we fail to appreciate how it might be done, and the way others have handled the challenges that we believe are ours alone. We tend to "admire the problem" but never arrive at a solution that will work for us. It can be easier to discuss than to do. "A fit of free verse " (yes, and it can definitely be that at times); a "swirl of imagery" (sometimes overdone and cloying, right?); "the stream of consciousness" (or some other style-of-the-moment, equally incomprehensible) --- we feel that these must be our tools, because others have used them and been praised for doing so. We therefore jettison what may be our greatest strengths in pursuit of what's trendy. We want to borrow from everyone and become no one. We defy self-classification and fear to be out of step. I love the assortment of names you include here! These are inspiring people with jagged perspectives; the Beat poets were nothing if not original and brave for their times. But unless we read, and read wisely with attention to what the poets are actually writing, we can run the risk of taking away not an iota of imagination or understanding. Then we do, indeed, miss the poetry for the poetics, the message for the medium. We become so obsessed with how we should write that we can't actually DO it. I think those "lost" poems are not only those of poets unrecognized, but also fragments of the speaker's own, unborn creations --- never realized, because he had no clue they were even gestating. Too late, he senses missed opportunities. Gene, I always enjoy your work and this one is no exception. In fact, I liked it well enough to grab it off the finalists' list and respond to it. I hope all's going your way and that summer is treating you kindly. Brenda


This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-08-06 21:12:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.96552
Gene: It’s a delight to find another of your poems once again. I especially enjoyed this poem as San Francisco is one of my favorite cities, as well as that of many friends. The lesson here is well-taken. The caveat to live less in our heads and more in our lives. The fantasy of love and romance can take over the reality of the present, and that caveat is well worth passing on and you have done so in your trademark "Gene" gentle style. I am struck by this one especially as I have missed many proximal or real-life situations due to my tendency to wool-gather and imagine rather than ‘living life’, for after all, these kinds of romances (the ones in our heads) are much safer than the face to face kind, where we risk heartbreak. It is only because we are so capable of love that we suffer, in my opinion. Sitting in a corner booth, Kerouac in hand, Cassady on my mind, A poem looked right into my eyes and I, in a fit of free verse, failed to see. Someone was there, who was not in the book, but living a poetic life in reality, and the poet, distracted by the ‘known’ poets, failed to see. This is very poignant. Crossing the street, two blocks down from City Lights, a taste of Ginsberg on my lips, Ferlinghetti phrases filling my head, a poem brushed close and I, in a swirl of imagery, ignored the touch. The touch was felt, but did not have the impact of Ginsberg or Ferlinghetti. The imagery captivated the speaker, but the potential lingering touch of the one ignored only brushed by. The internal landscape was more attractive than the potential lover. How many times do we pass by those who could replace our internal landscape with the reality of their being? Gathering in the park, old friends and literature, discussing commas and Corso, the value of rhyme and the freedom of reason, a poem passed by and I, deep in the stream of consciousness, barely felt the breeze. How we live in our rhymes and exalt in the freedom of our reason, when we have given up the freedom of our choices! And this serves as a reminder to readers that NOW will never come again, though we may repair to Corso at any time, for literature is static compared to relationship. Later, alone beneath a reading lamp, I searched yesterday's musings, looking for all those lost poems. With great poignancy, but without self-pity, the poet looks for “those lost poems” alone, reading again. Reflecting on the tenuous nature of contact and the disappointing results of ‘playing it safe’ when there is a world of possibilities passing us by. I don’t think that there are a finite number of people in the world to whom we are assigned nor whom are assigned to us to give and receive our love. In your poem, I realize that it is entirely possible to make of interior life a kind of prison, in which one may live, alone, in relative peace, all unaware of what has been missed. As always, your poetry excels in eliciting emotion, and a gentle reminder to remain awake and aware within one’s life for meaning which may be lost if not expressed. Magnificently done, once more, Gene. All my best, Joanne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-07-24 00:17:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.55769
Hello Gene, Your verbiage leaves visions of days gone by and missed opportunities resonating in my mind. The atmosphere is a poets dream, the missed moments a poets regret. How often have we all been in a place so pregnant with ideas that seem to dance before our minds briefly then flit away before we can capture them. I at times thought to have one of those personal recorders would be great for such times just realize that I would not use it for pure essence of the moment can elude so quickly. You have taken this reader on a grand journey of memory, thought and reflection. Good structure and continuous flow have brought this reader a delightful offering in your poem. Perhaps some day those poems will no longer be lost. Thank you honoring with this, I look forward to reading more of your work. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joyce P. Hale On Date: 2005-07-15 10:12:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.62963
Wonderful write, Gene!!! How many times do we find and lose a poem for lack of.... a pencil? paper? time? busyness? I especially loved these lines: *A poem looked right into my eyes and I, in a fit of free verse, failed to see.* and *a poem brushed close and I, in a swirl of imagery, ignored the touch.* Emotional imagery at its best! I enjoyed the setting of your write - San Francisco - for its free style and casualness. And the final verse is poignant and apropos. Very good write, and I cannot find suggestions for change at all.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-07-15 00:50:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.74286
Good morning Poet, so nice to find your name on my list of poetry this morning. It has been a while and I pray you are and have been well.......good structure and word flow which allows for emotions to come forth along with images thus created. So true to in the posting, there are so many times I myself wished I had a paper with pencil in hand to jot down notes, if nothing else, knowing when I did try to put it on paper the notes would bring back full force the impact of it all............again, your words have done just that created a wonderful reading piece. Perhaps I shall impose upon you someday and ask for your assistance in creation.........take care, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2005-07-14 15:40:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
BFB, Ah, the delicate, mystic Dixon touch. Where has it been? Your poems are always so . . . chiselled. It was really a pleasure to read this - sincerely. The Master of control and balance you are, Apollo to my Dionysius . . . I long to visit Olympus to see thee, and will check to see if Hephaestus is done with that damn wheel. FP
This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-07-14 13:29:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
Gene--You've penned well the frustrations of poets in a imaginative, humorous and great name dropping way. No,it's not just senility that grips the mind, for whatever reason inspiring thoughts are such fleeting things and when not captured at the moment they present themselves--they're lost to us forever. To help offset this phenomenon, I keep several pens and pads at the ready (even in the bathroom) for jotting down my flashes of brilliance-smile. Thanks for sharing this unique blithe insight into missed opportunitues. Sorry if I've miss the mark, but I did enjoy the read. TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-07-14 12:39:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88889
Ginsberg wrote: "What if somebody gave a war and nobody came?" Kind of reminds me of your piece, looking for that elusive poet, looking for that elusive line or phrase, lost poems and the like, and nobody was around. Of Cassady and Ferlinghetti I know not. These poets are not in any books I have, I suppose I could research the net for them. I guess they were poets hanging around Fisherman's Wharf? I don't know San Fran at all. However that said, I truly enjoyed the poem.. I am now told by my wife who is from San Fran that City Lights is a Book store where these intellectuals hung out. the value of rhyme and the freedom of reason....wonderful two lines here. I am not a fan of rhyme, but am certainly a person that values freedom to reason. I hope you found some of the lost musings.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2005-07-14 10:14:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.60000
GENE! Welcome home! The Lost Poems of San Francisco ah...yes Sitting in a corner booth, Kerouac in hand, Cassady on my mind, A poem looked right into my eyes and I, in a fit of free verse, failed to see. Well, the smoke of all those memories sort of gets in the way sometimes. I saw Ferlinghetti at San Diego State last month -he's still crazy after all these years. He said - "What the hell ever happened to Gene Dixon!" {well, no he didn't, actually he said "Move along, I have more books to sign" but I'm sure he was thinking it{. Crossing the street, two blocks down from City Lights, a taste of Ginsberg on my lips, Was it sort of bittersweet? Did it leave a lingering afterlife? Ferlinghetti phrases filling my head, ph man, yeah: And there are days when I see all too clearly And there are days When I am everyone I meet. and i'm the singing poet- the poet of the street a poem brushed close and I, in a swirl of imagery, vertigiounus stuff - you have to be carfeul imbibing it! ignored the touch. yes - can't be too careful well one can get caught in that razeberry whirlwind! Gathering in the park, old friends and literature, discussing commas and Corso, yep! And cosmos and Kant the value of rhyme and the freedom of reason, [ahhh sweet reason] a poem passed by and I, deep in the stream of consciousness, barely felt the breeze. catch it oh catch it quick Later, alone beneath a reading lamp, I searched yesterday's musings, looking for all those lost poems. and put them all together in this hellova piece! Great stuff Dixon - now you need to find an open mic and a beret! I'll be there with peace buttons and bows. Bravo! yours in Peace and Freedom R
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